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javi29931minCommentedWeary? You mean wary?
At first, she was weary but gradually got along with him. And this continued every day, that uncle would come and pick her up then they would play with Gaara.- javi29938minCommented
Well, wait until she meets Po Tato and Skel Etal.
First things first, HIS NAME IS ASHBORN AND HE CHOSE CID… ASHBORN IS SUCH A SICK NAME, THOUGH. WHY WOULD HE WANT TO CHANGE IT? When I'm older and able to talk, daddy and I are going to have a serious talk about names. - javi2991dCommented
What is sochi?
The busty redhead woman was in her own world before doing what she knew was wrong. "Sochi!" Kushina said, not letting her son know that she had seen him masturbate. She giggled silently as she heard him sputter in surprise. - javi2991dCommented
she saw me? he asked himself *
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Why add a daily mission that gives gold if in the end you are going to totally forget that it gives gold? 60 days at 5 gold per day should have a minimum of 300 from the missions alone.
20 wasn't too much of a discount but to Azaroth who only had 100 Gold, It was a Lifesaver but what if he got sent to an E-rank demonic dungeon… He would earn less than 100 Gold which would not let him buy another Dungeon key. - javi2991dCommented
Maybe you should censor the word R*pe from the title, preferably, it would be better to delete it completely from the title, they usually delete novels for having the word R*pe in the synopsis and I don't know if they will do the same for being in the title of a chapter.
Ch 39 CHAPTER 39 – MY FIRST AND LAST R*PE (+18) - javi2991dReplied to MarinXGrayfia
kumo desu ga nami ka
Hearing Igris, my brain almost exploded in amazement. 'HE'S AN ANGEL!? MY DADDY WAS CREATED BY GOD SO HE MUST BE AN ANGEL!? DOES THAT MAKE ME AN ANGEL AS WELL!? FORGET BEING A PRINCESS; THAT'S SO LAME. AN ANGEL IS WAY COOLER.' - javi2991dCommented
An idea just occurred to me, I'll leave it to you in case you're interested, the MC or John could hire the previous Charlie Angels, I think it was implied that they were retired in the new movie, you could make it so that they had had an accident and need the healing ability or simply to be young again and back into action, they decide to work for him or her.
Ch 38 Injected John with Extremis. - javi2992dCommented
10/10
A/N: Hmmm, I wrote this chapter while feeling sleepy and unwilling, so hope you like it, I guess. - javi2992dCommented
Rino Arato not kato
- Rino Kato. - javi2992dCommented
And perks
A/N: I will write about his new skills in the next chapter. It wouldn't make sense to write about It now. - javi2993dCommented
I think this should be a title not a skill
Defender of Legal and Illegal Lolis (Unleveled): Thanks to this ability, Lolis, whether legal or illegal, will have a good impression of you as soon as they meet you and not only that, if you see someone who has intentions of raping a loli, whether legal or not, the skill will be able to detect it, Castrate all Lolicons on this planet because they don't deserve to live! - javi2993dCommented
I think that should say c*strating all r*pists instead of c*strating all l*licons, because the MC is a l*licon, you can't deny it.
Defender of Legal and Illegal Lolis (Unleveled): Thanks to this ability, Lolis, whether legal or illegal, will have a good impression of you as soon as they meet you and not only that, if you see someone who has intentions of raping a loli, whether legal or not, the skill will be able to detect it, Castrate all Lolicons on this planet because they don't deserve to live! - javi2993dCommented
Without regeneration? Because I find it even more useful to mention regeneration than heat control.
Ava nodded and said, "You have to endure high pain when Extremis serum is used, but then you can control heat up to 1000 degrees Celsius with your body. Also, if you overuse it, you will be exhausted or might lose consciousness." - javi2994dCommented
Blonde? Can you post photos of the characters? When I looked it up on the internet, she wasn't blonde, although I don't know if you changed it or if I didn't find the correct photo.
In contrast, sitting on my right is my 'sister' Lisa. She is in her usual school uniform. She is 18, blonde, and a head shorter than me, at around five feet four or five. She is adorable, sweet, and kinda shy in a way. And very innocent, especially with how naïve she can get at times and her soft-spoken way of talking to people, or that attitude when she wants to tell you something without speaking aloud for everyone to hear it. Speaking of her body, she is a bit petite and slender, while not lacking in the sex appeal area, so to speak, with the curves in the appropriate places, the tiny waist, the peach ass. She got somewhat big boobies on that petite body. - javi2994dCommented
Doom (2005)?
Ava called Anna to close the Roses Research Lab of Roses Pharmaceuticals for a few days. Ava wants to create Chromosome-24 (CH-24). She was fully concentrated while checking the minor details of the results in the simulation. - javi2995dCommented
If the MC is literally Mash, the mark should be under the left eye, not right eye.
He had black hair styled in a bowl-cut with bangs swept to the right, and his yellow-gold eyes stared down at me, examining me. A black lightning mark ran from the bottom of his right eye down to his chin.