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Raphxoy

Raphxoy

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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy1yr
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    I would vote for One Piece. I like this novel but I would say start the other with 50 chapter so you can get the story on paper before it disappears. normally I would not vote for adding another story while there are multiple other unfinished ones but i trust you to eventually finish all the novels you start. i also would like to see how you write an intelligent MC without it just being "the MC is intelligent because the antagonists posses no self control and act like they are not actually capable of thinking their actions through"

    Ch 101 Potential New Story?
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy1yr
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    and it deleted both???

    Ch 101 Potential New Story?
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    I, Your Father, Carry a Big Stick
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy1yr
    Commented

    why did it post twice??

    Ch 101 Potential New Story?
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
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    I am honestly not really expecting much from this showdown between the Musashis. When we got the part in the beginning from the perspective of Musashi black, I immediately realized there would be no great showdown as I felt like Musashi Black has sort of lost her own way as she subconsciously restricted herself to actions that were pleasing to the crowd watching instead of what you would expect of someone with the name Miyamoto Musashi, where she would do anything to win/advance her swordsmanship no matter how shameless or underhanded regardless of what the any audience wanted. While Musashi Pink has been with Vahn who has broken her original perspective on swords and continuously showing her there are higher heights to reach. You can see it in one of the earlier chapters where Musashi Pink says that she would sell her soul without hesitation if it got her 1 step closer on her path as swordswoman while Musashi Black shows no such determination.

    Ch 2213 Tensions : Relaxation
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    Endless Path : Infinite Cosmos
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
    Commented

    Naturally Da Vinci is far more imba as unlike Authority, Da Vinci only gets more and more imba.

    Ch 2188 Working Out the Kinks
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
    Commented

    if he knows that the Blade of a thousand grudges gets more powerful from absorbing the power of Darkness from the things he kills with it then why does hee keep using the vermillion sword?

    Ch 41 Kyros’s Leadership
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
    Commented

    I have been here and approve of this chapter

    Ch 2142 Suitability
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
    Commented

    First comment is mine?

    Ch 2137 Lesson
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
    Commented

    I approve of this chapter

    Ch 2135 Subtle Yet Drastic Changes
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
    Commented

    RIP Yo walked in the dragon's den on her own totally unaware

    Ch 2097 The Gears of Fate
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
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    I also feel like if the Supreme Combat exercise is as painful as it says then why does he still feel pain in battles? the pain he felt using the exercise should be enough that these injuries are just a minor annoyance especially after the horde fight when he had to us the Exercise for hours at one time even ignoring the refinement engine that was used at the same time.

    Ch 39 Searing Hog
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy2yr
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    Why are the fights so long regardless of whether you consider 30 minutes to kill a hog, 4 hours to kill 2 rhinos, and the horde fight that was at least 10 hours of nonstop fighting while out numbered and being attacked from all sides, the kind of stamina you need to fight this long under these conditions is definitely ridiculous for our MC to have right in the beginning especially when it is mentioned that he doesn't have any good techniques or a high level beast to help him.

    Ch 39 Searing Hog
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy3yr
    Commented

    I vote for the Breathing technique thank you for the chapter

    Ch 19 Decisions, Decisions...
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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy3yr
    Replied to Raphxoy

    should be "plotting" of fate in the story development part of the review

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  • Raphxoy
    Raphxoy3yr
    Posted

    I found the writing quality to be high, specifically the sentences were spaced well, the word choice was concise. There were also areas that could be improved, particularly there could be a little more descriptive words added in when events happen. For example in the first chapter when he was reminiscing about when the Principle called child services to talk to him about his family situation, the author said there was a painful grimace on his face but it could have been better to describe the pain (what kind of pain came with the grimace? did it throb? was it sharp or dull? did it last a long time? etc...). other examples would be when in chapter 7 after waking from getting assaulted he felt both relieved and annoyed but it doesn't really talk about how it felt to be relieved or annoyed at the time (was the relief like the feeling of a cool breeze on a hot day or was it like a weight lifted of his shoulder when he found his arm in a splinter? was the annoyance bubbling like it was boiling rapidly or slowly like the wind eroding a stone?) In regards to the story development there really isn't anything new just yet. The MC dies, gets reincarnated with a cheat, though a I have not read where the cheat is clicker game but considering the MC was skilled at playing the clicker games on Earth this is nothing really new. Afterward he does try to escape the "plotting" fate which does it make interesting but until he successfully does so it would remain fairly predictable. Admittedly this will likely be easily resolved as the story gets longer and even just 14 chapters in there is not a part of the story that I can just point to and say "this feels very forced" instead it flows well together, very likely to be planned out in advance. The Character design is good and logical. When Yui realizes that she became the very type of person she hated, her thoughts go back to when her grandmother told her that she wasn't ready which she now understood was a good touch, describing the change in her emotions with more descriptive words like before would be better but the progression of emotions was accurate considering what types emotions people feel in similar real life situations. Furthermore the actions of the characters match well with their personalities, obviously the characters were well thought out before being actually written in and their motivations for doing things is expressed clearly and further elaborated upon when the chance shows up (like Yui becoming a warrior to getting away from being forced to be a concubine but in a later chapter mentioning how she wouldn't even be able to have children if she hadn't escaped). They are not just a cookie cutter description that pasted on and forgotten about later like some authors do but they actually affect the way the story develops making it feel like the people are really trying to live their lives to the best of their ability. The update frequency of this novel is fairly high (14 chapters in 5 days = ~3 chapters/day) and this author has proven their commitment to finishing the projects they started so even if updates slow down they will still be consistent. better yet this author is more than willing to communicate how things are going for them in regards to the state of the book and interacts with the readers both actively during discussions on Discord and by replying to comments (which by the way are all being read). Lastly the world development was familiar enough to Earth that there wasn't a lot of introduction needed giving this story a low barrier of entry but was also different enough with the introduction of cultivation and it's effects on society that lets it be an interesting "What if"/Alternate Universe. Overall I find this novel to interesting and am willing to wait and see where the author takes us on this adventure as well as look forward to how they include things like legendary heroes and monsters.

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    Nobunaga Oda's Isekai Cultivation Experience
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