Kyuse
of reading
28
Read books
Typo: not point ~> no point
Discount should be 75% total correct?
Typo: over all ~> overall Thanks for the chapter!
I imagine one of the reasons people are getting triggered is because the no sleep part could be something that the author believed in rather than knowingly adding it as a fantasy element. It's something that someone who doesn't know about sleep being necessary could read and believe is real, while the bending of light waves through pure mental prowess is something that is clearly fantasy and has not been showcased in reality. One situation is clearly fiction, while the other isn't quite so obvious. Just my 2c
'caution first' - decides to challenge the top 5 people at once when the bookie was fine with randoms. Guess he probably wants to subdue them all at once but very risky, especially since he's only taken 1-3 NuSmoothies.
Good point but if he was able to afford them wouldn’t the top fighters of a corrupt organization be able to take tons?
Typo: this age were the ~> this age where the
Although I understand that it’s a fantasy world, I think it’d make for a better novel if things were still logical and that it made sense in that novel’s world. Don’t get me wrong I’m still enjoying the novel but I just want to provide my own (hopefully) constructive criticism. i.e. if there was at least a small process of him taking supplements and training back to his original form that would make it fit the novel’s logic and world. Sure I understand him using martial arts to cripple his enemies but it’d be nice if the author gave more backstory on how strong the martial arts is, because at this point we have no idea. He could literally go super saiyan and do a kamehameha next chapter and it could be attributed to martial arts and qi. There’s no limit on his potential powers or what he can or can’t do. I suppose if this is just meant to be a power trip for the reader than I’m barking up the wrong tree though. Regardless, interesting story and keep it up.
Small capitalization error: earth ~> Earth
Could be that someone recognized he looks similar since they can't change their appearance much. Could be someone from his organization ratting him out too
Grammar issues: run-on sentences and awkward phrasing. Potential fix: (...) at the city center. A few signs of night life were available in this particular district, especially neon lights (...)
Typo: of ~> off
Grammar: slaughter quite literally every ~> slaughter and quite literally kill
Typo: titled ~> tilted
Grammar: Sounds better with “Apart from Anguis and Sasha”
I hope the story mentions how much money he has soon.. from my understanding he's spent the 1000 gold coins from killing Ratchet and 500+ additional gold on buying equipment, potions, merchant shops. Just would be nice to have a general ballpark, though I suppose he’s likely going to be able to afford everything he wants anyways
Is it possible to edit these chapters? Or is it a lengthy process?
Typo: leap up ~> leapt up. Assuming the Bone Golem has multiple ankle bones, otherwise ankles should be ankle.
Typo: as of staring ~> as if staring
Grammar: barely shell of ~> barely a shell of