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Dude, just so you know there is a thing know as inheritance tax... For "Noble Houses".... Which would leave even then destitute.

Dude how did they score a goal are you missing a chapter?

Thanks for reading the message. I really like the novel and hope you continue with it, it could be very good.

I'm pretty sure that mom is a "he"...

Why does his age keep changing.... It was 6 months till 15, then 2 months, then 1 month. Now it 5 months... Dude....really...

Dude I'm starting to get annoyed with you... Susanna, became Suzanna... Captain Bread became Captain Loaf....

Fuck me man... Really, the Bucks Steelhorns now....... Dude they were from Southampton... The freaking Southampton Stags...

Who the f*** is Bawang long??

Gu Ran's school name is the Southampton Staggs?? Not the Buck Ironhorns.....[img=Cries]

Look, it's got a great story and development... However there are inconsistencies, the name of one of the players that left keeps changes. The players names on the field are not always accurate. The 53 or 54 chapter is a repeat chapter. The name used for the school the main character plays for changes in the 62+ chapter.... It gets confusing... Overall it a very good story... Just keep everything constant