I hope this isn’t one of those Systems with a personality or an MC puppeted by one. This whole blackmail would just be a one off. Since otherwise, what use it there to read about slavery?

This may be too late but at this point in time, Palpatine is still the Naboo ambassador to the Galactic Senate, not a Chancellor. Pardon me if you’ve made creative changes to that though.

Totally broke whatever dark and dangerous tone going on with the inclusion of Valera. Starting from when she showed up, the story went from dangerous to childishly comedic. The writing is still great, I just personally find Valera’s characterization as a cliche ditzy cheerleader-esque undead very dislikable. If this were anime, I bet I would constantly see an “uwu uwu” cutesy scene.

This drama would’ve been a nice touch if the novel included how he got close to his soldiers, an emotional attachment to the readers. Right now, it’s just him being so emotional over people he leads but barely knows like a novice soldier and not a seasoned general.

MC is a Psycho Puppy and Avilia is his master.

Good thing there was a warning about how Xanxia-level trashy the early chapters are.

The MC is a pushover.

A lord hunting for rats, really? Quite odd for a lord of the place to be given and doing menial labor, excuse me, “quests” from his own people in his own town. Are there no administration level quests related to him being a lord? There’s more but maybe it’ll be answered in later chaps. Otherwise, I like it so far~

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

More please~ Or is this on another platform too? 🤍💚 There can never be enough BrIghtWin fanfics! 🐰☀️ weee

I love it. 😊

Tip: Being curt is infinitely better than having an argument. “Thanks reader.” Done.