DiamondDust

Well… title does say “Most Annoying System Ever”

Too much attention was given to the MC. Even before he got to Hogwarts. And now this over the top scholarship awarding. Doesn’t Hogwarts normally offer scholarship to poor students and some bit of allowance anyway? lol made it so dramatic as if it was unique.

A mess. They all talk like kids pretending to be adults, even the adults. Every detail is laid out, practically leaves nothing to imagination so it’s like reading a dry textbook but with certain entertaining parts in bursts. Perhaps its the translation, but could’ve written it better. I wondered where the story is going in the 1-50 chapters since what I waz reading was just a bunch of HS kids doing what they do. Just with magic. So nothing special at all. Like watching paint dry. His goals weren’t even set nor his plans. He was bumbling along the story. The Healer, yes. But I guess we would be slogging through the Hogwarts years like 99% of HP ffs out there before we get to “Healer” portion without the school mess.

TF did I just read? First 3 chapters were already confusing as hell, but the copy paste from a certain website is clear here. "Rolled his Byakugan eyes..."? Now Garp can even tell he was a person and out of nowhere became a grandson instead of a pet he picked up out of nowhere? "Original" ha.

… Well, you can really tell that this was a Chinese AI fanfic, there are many inconsistent parts such as Yamamoto being surprised Kazuma hasn’t achieved Bankai yet. He just achieved Shikai previously, and Yama was there to witness it. So unless I didn’t read that it has been many years since he came back to SS, then Yama should‘t be shocked. lol

Probably one of the best MHA fic I’ve read, so far. Characterization and Storytelling is topnotch for this place. I like how you didn’t just handwave away the downsides of his decision and he’s still struggling but slowly getting better - but not in a very linear way, which is how most people deal with things.

Idea was great, refreshing plot. Execution can be improved. I just don’t like how author doesn’t use AI assist correctly. Sometimes it reads like a wikia page copy pasted into the storytelling and moves on.

Why love mixing meta knowledge as part of the storytelling? It only causes confusion and takes out people out of immersion - not even prophecy-like delivery but something you write in wikia. If you’re gonna use AI to make your fic better, at least know how to edit that sht out.

The shift from inner monologue and author meta-knowledge… is non existent. It was like Asura was also an Earthling transmigrator mentioning DD2 and 3.

Is that TAO? A simpy, whiny woman? God this fic is a disgrace. Victor bounces from being competent to a pathetic idiot more times than I can count.