GHOSTKIDD

why does this toilet sound better than my studio

I think he meant Elliot not realizing she's fake, if you spend time with twins u can easily tell when identical twins are acting like the other twin much less when there's physical magic between two ppl

There are two paragraphs that are repeated before and after the monorail. Prolly should spend a bit more time editing or get an editor. having repeating paragraphs breaks the immersion and just leaves a bad taste in the mouth

you might need an editor to fix a few grammatical errors that break immersion here and there

if you were to be forced to live in a country whose native language was different from yours while also taking classes you'd be surprised how easily it is to pick up on the native language ~thoughts of an native English speaker that went to college in Spain

Can someone explain to me why he's soo obsessed with the dying girl ? like I've never seen romance this forced n ice read novels where the rape victims becomes a wife candidate (ATG looking at you )