A 2 year old dead fanfic.. had a lot of potential.. it makes me cry finding these 😭

Its late and stuff.. but why does he keep adding patterns to his beam.. why not just focus on speed.. like if he hits a small part of the target its basically immobilizes them he has free hit.. why focus on making patterns in his disk?

Only gripe i have about this is his seemingly infinite energy as he just keeps throwing beam after beam, like... Is he a stamina monster or is the devil fruit just costless? In most fics uaing devil fruit usually eats stamina or physical strength.. what gives??

Is this mtl? If so whats its chinese title?

Discovered this story recently.. so when i saw the update gap, i didnt really feel it.. its like youve been here all the time for me 🤣

How daheck did she guess hes from the future just from describing something from a movie.... where did the leap of logic come from... and i dont even know if shes serious or not... makes the scene feel so ditached... im gonna read a few more chapters.. but im already thinking of dropping this

Hard to trust an author who doesnt even know what rhyme means... you read magus as mei-gos or something? To make it rhyme with psychos?

From 600k to 1.2 billion??? Billion??? Daheck, skipped liked a couple hundred millions there, just seems like too much of a stupid price hike

Continuity is too confusing.. its just one scene from the next.. i cant even picture the scene happening...

Its good if you stick to the direct writing style consistently, theres also a trick in which to drop hints in this type of storytelling.. im still reading it as of today im at ch 39.. the following 2 chapters from this chapter i filled me in with what i was missing. which is fortunate because im binge reading. But if i was reading it when it was releasing, id have waited a day or two and wouldve lost attention.. keep it up i look forward to your writing. It keepa me relaxed

This chapter really makes me wanna drop it.. not because of the story.. just the way you write it. Some authors write in a way that has a little bit of foreshadowing thats not noticeable, something very subtle. but with your writing style that is quick and to the point(which isn't bad) it just doesnt subconsciously prepare anyone for an acceptable twist.. that it just leaves me hanging with a weird sense of disappointment.

I miss the days when a system is just a system... novels nowadays give the system too many annoying features.. what ever happened to work with what you got.. now even the system can be begged for anything... makes the system lose its uniqueness and mystery if any host can just bargain with it.

Take a break dude.. you've been updating in great speeds lately that this new chapter is full of awkward mistakes. Example... when he said he didnt experience men???? Like whut.. it just sounds gay, proper response should have been "you just havent seen someone as unique as me" Also stopped reading at halfway point of this chapter cause im sleep deprived and dont wanna confuse myself so id check back on this tomorrow... nyt

Ahhh the weab is strong in this one....

I once had a flame war in the komi manga comment section and told the troll to write a story which contains what his preferred version of komi should go... and i hope that wasnt you cause im liking this version and i dont wanna admit im wrong to a stranger on the internet.

The regen rate is too large.. specially at his level.. its too big, it essentially makes him wolverine at how low his hp is and will only take a few minutes to get back at full health.

Too much shacking and not enough shaking.. seriously though.. it keeps catching me off guard... brings me out of my reading groove

Not really.. ruined my immersion by a lot.. ill keep reading, but it wont have the same feel i had originally... i took it seriously at first.. now im just a casual with no commitment

Yes.. but think about how minato is an orphan borne ninja that used hiraishin thousands of times.. the chakra hes got he got through training.. also not really about size.. depends more on how much chakra the summon needs i.e the old toads. While naruto over there had to tap into the 9 tails when he had first summoned the boss toad.. if thats how hiraishin works man.. how many 9 tails does minato have in him

This chapter was simply an orgasmic read