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I dunno this just seems forced. Hasn't he been sparring with Maki and Mei throughout this period? If so he should have thought of this before. It's fine if you want to write flaws, but don't do it if it doesn't make sense. Also don't weirdly keep saying he's above chunin level and imply he's jonin if he needs his sister to save him. The fight scene was pretty underwhelming and lackluster.

Don't quote me, but I think that was towards the earth element? Regardless utilizing only the water element is a weakness in and of itself.

It's not my family so I don't care. This is repeated too much. How warmed up is his heart by now?

This is like a weird superhero novel. It's becoming a let down like when you found out Harry Potter's ultimate power was love....

how can you spit 4 times simultaneously? I think you mean continuously or I at least hope...

Already I'm lost. Why does she think a sealed branch member from the hyuga faction has the potential to become Hokage candidate let alone Hokage? Ofc I understand that Hiruzen told her beforehand about his ploy, but this guy never even mentioned his want to become Hokage from the chapters provided.

I don't understand what the fuck happened. Feels like a whole chapter was skipped. Ofc I can piece together the main clan kids tortured him with the caged bird seal. Tsunade was probably watching and he did something to remind her of her lover/brother... but where the fuck is the scene?

Author: ONCE AGAIN... the anwser is on the next line. 😂

Apparently.

Where did crisis from knowing he's living in a fictional work go? oops.