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DaoistFreddieG14hCommentedShould’ve called it the crush crush fruit
[Pulverize-Pulverize Fruit - Gives the user the ability to crush anything into pieces, making them a Pulverizing Human.]- DaoistFreddieG16hCommented
Cyclops has no physical enhancements. He’s basically a normal human who trained really hard, but still has squishy flesh and normal bones. he would’ve died getting punched at that speed and power. Moving that fast and punching that hard enhances the final force of the blow to the point where he should’ve had a hole blown through his chest
Scott coughed twice from where he stood, rising from the ground and dusting off his uniform. With a composed demeanor, he assured, "I'm alright." - DaoistFreddieG16hCommented
I don’t think the author understands that grip strength and punching force are two entirely different things. Grip strength has to do with your forearms and finger strength. Punching force has to do with full body muscle movement to drive your fist into some thing. Punching force would be much higher than grip strength; much higher than only two times stronger than grip strength.
With a grip strength of six tons, each punch packed a force of at least twelve tons. Adding a charge would further enhance the explosive power with additional kinetic energy. - DaoistFreddieG17hCommented
Just say he reverse engineered it
On top of that if he were to reveal Fuinjutsu, Spirit Transformation Technique and a bunch of jutsu only once used by Tobirama, anyone would be able to see that he has a problem. - DaoistFreddieG17hCommented
Everyone’s asking about whether or not Roshi should count, but no one’s asking the real question. How has he not beaten a kage level fighter over the course of a year and a half worth of fighting in a war? You mean to tell me he hasn’t fought Gaara’s dad again, and he hasn’t grown to the level of Kage yet?
Main Task: Defeat a Kage Rank Shinobi before ranked Jonin (20% Template Progress/Incomplete) - DaoistFreddieG17hCommented
The first sign of insanity is talking to yourself
"What Power!" - DaoistFreddieG17hCommented
Wow, that’s degrading. Looking 12 years old? As if that’s something to be proud of
He looked around 12, and stood at 170 cm quite tall for his age. - DaoistFreddieG17hCommented
Why is it that every author that writes a Naruto fanfiction has to come up with an epithet for the main character? It’s one of the most overdone clichés in this fandom. Just have his name be well-known, not some over achieving, chunni epithet.
"Yeah, The Blue Storm of Leaf! Truly turning out to be the difference maker." - DaoistFreddieG3dCommented
What type of idiot passes up the ability to become one of the strongest people in the universe? Especially when he knows the plot and how to control said power. It sounds so dumb to pass that up.
Closing his eyes, Izuku both surprised and impressed All Might by saying, "As I am, I'm unworthy of such power. After all, while it's true that I want to help people, my reasons for becoming a Hero are fairly selfish. Leading the next generation and becoming the Symbol of Peace...I'm not sure I'm capable of such selflessness..." - DaoistFreddieG4dReplied to DaoistFreddieG
I stand corrected lol
With his current physical attributes, Izuku doubted he could defeat even the weakest Villain bot. If he focused on helping people, however, there was a good chance he could pass without needing to. The only problem was that the UA Entrance Exam was just the beginning. Once he became a student, Izuku would be expected to participate in combat and rescue training, exercises that would require skillful use of one's Quirk or a strong physique. - DaoistFreddieG4dCommented
So just put 50 in each category. Bakugo had like 25-30 points for each category, roughly. I’m pretty sure that him putting 50 in each would make him stand out and he get the traits. You’re just nerfing him for the exam for no reason.
With his current physical attributes, Izuku doubted he could defeat even the weakest Villain bot. If he focused on helping people, however, there was a good chance he could pass without needing to. The only problem was that the UA Entrance Exam was just the beginning. Once he became a student, Izuku would be expected to participate in combat and rescue training, exercises that would require skillful use of one's Quirk or a strong physique. - DaoistFreddieG4dCommented
So he decides not to read her mind? Learn a whole bunch of secrets? Lack of impulse control
That night, that particular basement was filled with screams of utter despair of a woman that shall haunt the building for the years to come.. - DaoistFreddieG4dCommented
I see you like the dumb and dense protagonist troupe. Honestly disgusting.
Ignoring the intense gaze of Illyana and whatever i sensed from her using my [Empathy], I extended my [TK Domain] and observed the houses near us and the residents within them. Seeing all of them acting normal was enough as it seems they didn't really heard the pained howls of father just now. Not bad, seems like the soundproof force-field i placed around the house was effective. - DaoistFreddieG4dCommented
He barely fought it for less than a minute
Minutes turned to hours as they converse and laughed along the tour trying to know more about each other. Andrew was already getting bored with the constant talk and touring as he already explored most of the big mansion's corners using his TK Domain and was already getting sleepy–fighting a gigantic nigh immortal bear is taxing if you don't know. - DaoistFreddieG11dReplied to RagingDrake
A quarter of the way done with the story and nothing has really happened. I feel like the ending is going to be incredibly rushed because we’re still in the tiny world. All the relationships are going to be incredibly rushed at the very end also. It’s going to go from a slow burn to an immediate “We’re going to sleep together” to wrap everything up.
She liked Lin Lingtian . - DaoistFreddieG11dReplied to DaoistFreddieG
Soul force*
[ Soul Force Infusion : 50 Pure of Attributeless and All Attributed Soul Force entering the Dantian per second ] - DaoistFreddieG11dCommented
He can gain 10,000 soul points in three minutes and 20 seconds
[ Soul Force Infusion : 50 Pure of Attributeless and All Attributed Soul Force entering the Dantian per second ] - DaoistFreddieG11dCommented
Wowwwww Jesus Christ this is getting old. Same song and dance every time things are about to get good. It gets old real quick
Yang Xin opened her eyes and saw she was kissing Lin Lingtian's palms . - DaoistFreddieG12dCommented
Wait, a second. Shouldn’t it be circulating 24/7? He has the duration at infinite.
The War God Technique had stopped circulating .