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Littleluckyrabbit2yrCommentedCh 125 The diablo empire only has exhibitionists (part 1)- Littleluckyrabbit3yrCommented
Wrong. Burning wood does smell good
"Well, the smoke coming from burning wood doesn't have a nice scent either, does it?" - Littleluckyrabbit3yrCommented
If he was really weak would he have been able to join? I think Moulin needs to chill out. He gets upset when people assume he is weak, but then when the time comes to test whether people are strong he gets so indignant.
Moulin stared at Jagra intently. It was revolting to see someone taunting the weak. It made him want to freeze the man alive. - Littleluckyrabbit3yrCommented
I feel like his attitude is a bit ridiculous and contradictory. He has no qualms murdering people, but when an Academy differentiates by strength he feels dispirited? A little bit confused as to his mentality.
Moulin didn't feel disappointed. Although he felt a wee bit dispirited, it was wholly because of the fact that the Azuran academy prefers to differentiate its people by rank. Right, he was never enthusiastic to enter this academy in the first place. - Littleluckyrabbit3yrCommented
Whenever those shows are like "I am out of water now I'll filter my pee to survive " I just think " perhaps death is better?"
He ripped a part of his silk coat and removed the thickest thread from it and started working on catching fish. Back on earth, He wasted days and months watching those boring Naked Survival shows to impress this vile scum of a human ex of his who was so into these things since childhood. Although, all those knowledge was now a great aid this time. Sure, he's amateurish but he'll get the hang of it sooner. - Littleluckyrabbit3yrPosted
I gave a low rating because I was very disappointed in consistency. Every character design collapsed without warning, so it sometimes seemed as though they were completely different people out of nowhere. I also think that the author got caught up in having exciting and climactic chapters without considering whether those plot developments actually made sense with what was already written. I normally try to stay away from such dramatic stories for this reason, but I was impressed with the author's writing fluency which is a breath of fresh air among many grammatical tragedies on here. However, even after trying to force myself through over 100 chapters I finally gave up. The main character has a rough past which leads him to be emotionally unstable. But if you are going to portray him as a strong but struggling character, then keep him that way. Not have him emotionally torn between every other character in the story like some harem novel protagonist. As for the character Jayden, through a large part of the story he was portrayed in one light(trying not to spoil) bit then abruptly everything in the past was a lie? It didn't make sense, with the little to nonexistent foreshadowing. I am not trying to be overly critical, but I think either the story needed to be paced a little slower or there is a very large plothole. I hope that the author continues to pursue their passion for writing as they are very talented.