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picture where ?

hey boss, what about Appolinia and his kid.

Why was he antagonistic to Micheal on their first meeting ? wouldn't be better to leave a good impression?

honestly, it's a good enough reason in and of itself. it also means he is a prideful guy. Just keep that in mind and keep his characterization consistent, not a bad character flaw, to be honest.

another path, Re-Destro is planning the long con with recruitment after seeing his power. he descalates without parents' involvement, and the MC agrees as he is on his last legs, which buys him time for his next move, whatever it may be.

First of all, I apologise if it sounds or may sound combative, really not my intention. I liked the previous liberation of this story despite it flaws. This one started perfect, if not for this little plot hole, and really irks me. obvious plot holes/unexplained logic like that can really kill a story, and I don't want that. my suggestion is to stick to your original conclusion to this Arc, just change how you went about it. I can guess from the latest chapter that he is going for an anti-hero, independent type. If so, then just escaping from Re-Destro and being labelled as problematic in the media, and having a meeting/ being aware of the HPSC after him, ties all of this with a neat little bow.

you didn't really reply to my other points. and I meant maybe play along with the recruitment pitch ? then do his own thing later.

and if that was his only worry, he shouldn't have fought in the first place.

This is pretty stupid and out of the left field for a supposedly intelligent and grey MC, stopping the fight when he was winning and agreeing on keeping the Meta liberation a secret for the sake of two people who he hold no familial affection for and were basically planning on making him a child soldier. kinda soured the whole thing. if you had plans down the line for the Meta liberation, this wasn't the best way to keep them relevant.

honestly, Yun Yun got the short end of the stick in canon. and in BTTH fics rare as they are, she is almost an afterthought. Hopefully, you give her a better fate here. I'd like her to be included in the Harem, but it's your story at the end of the day.

is there a chapter missing or something author ?. A really weird transition from the previous chapter.

Honestly, I'm glad you are taking criticism into consideration. Another point is his relationships with his family. At this moment, they feel opportunistic. As his only value to them is his power, which isn't very condutive if you plan to develop their relationship in a positive way in the future. They need a bit of redemption arc for that. If it's heading in a negative one, then you are in the clear.

I'm not trying to flame you, so hopefully, you take what I write next as constructive criticism. Drama is important in a story, I agree. but there is a difference between drama that feels natural to the plot and artificial ones. In this case, he hid something from one of his girlfriends. She found out and was solved in like 3 dialogue lines. so there was no payoff to that little segment. If your MC isn't stupid, he would have learned from that little interaction not to repeat that mistake again. But having him learn nothing from it, just for a little drama down the line with MJ and May, is bad writing.

Is he gonna tell MJ and Aunt May about spider man ?. Gwen should have been a wake up call, or are you milking it for drama ?

honestly, this is stupid. They should have just killed him and been done with it. Instead of Olga playing some kind of 4D chess.

Then, have him develop his demonic power then, which is based on imagination. better than somehow removing the concept of a conceptual power.

How does that work exactly ? Power of destruction is an energy capable of conceptually destroying anything it comes in contact with.

thank you

I meant the picture of marika on your story