is there a chapter missing or something author ?. A really weird transition from the previous chapter.

Honestly, I'm glad you are taking criticism into consideration. Another point is his relationships with his family. At this moment, they feel opportunistic. As his only value to them is his power, which isn't very condutive if you plan to develop their relationship in a positive way in the future. They need a bit of redemption arc for that. If it's heading in a negative one, then you are in the clear.

I'm not trying to flame you, so hopefully, you take what I write next as constructive criticism. Drama is important in a story, I agree. but there is a difference between drama that feels natural to the plot and artificial ones. In this case, he hid something from one of his girlfriends. She found out and was solved in like 3 dialogue lines. so there was no payoff to that little segment. If your MC isn't stupid, he would have learned from that little interaction not to repeat that mistake again. But having him learn nothing from it, just for a little drama down the line with MJ and May, is bad writing.

Is he gonna tell MJ and Aunt May about spider man ?. Gwen should have been a wake up call, or are you milking it for drama ?

honestly, this is stupid. They should have just killed him and been done with it. Instead of Olga playing some kind of 4D chess.

Then, have him develop his demonic power then, which is based on imagination. better than somehow removing the concept of a conceptual power.

How does that work exactly ? Power of destruction is an energy capable of conceptually destroying anything it comes in contact with.

thank you

I meant the picture of marika on your story

his little one too

bro, I need the fics pictures. can you comment it.

Don't know how this one flew under the radar, but it's seriously amazing for a high school of dead fanfic. I'm a bit worried that the harem may be getting a bit too big and relationships developing too fast, still prefer it over othersthat spend forever before Z-day though. The plot has been really interesting there maybe a bit of a crossover the author has been cooking. The main character is really likeable, and there is no meaningless character basheing (Takashi). I highly recommend you give it a read

I trust you man, so i cant wait, I'm too invested at this point anyway. seriously though, I understand that what you are doing, building up his power base and like the gentleman replied he is at a uniquely oppertune time. but you have been at it non-stop for some time. hopefully, we get way, waay less of that in the next arc. serious question though, is business going to be a main focus going forward ?

assistant director I think

seriously, man, I love this story, and I love you, but I'm really getting tired of all these business deals. It has been going since his tour, and I'm getting burnt out. It's turning into a business simulator.

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why is he doing this exactly? does he think he is a match for Whitebeard ? and why is he so hung on joining the warlords ?

why ?

I just binged it, a really interesting premise. just tone down the system and try to change system and skills announcements from normal text. it's really hard to read.

it's a really bad way of using her devil fruit. human leave their cells on everything they touch, it would be better to turn bullets coated in her cells into explosive shells. instead of somehow making an air explosion bullet ?