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Gralorn

Gralorn

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I am just your everyday cultivator. My dao is the dao of daoheart.

2017-07-15 JoinedHungary
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn3mth
    Commented

    An average population of 2500 people/village is huge.

    Unfortunately, during their mission to reclaim the territory, the army discovered that four villages had been wiped out during the civil war due to famine, cold, wild animals, or bandit attacks. This loss meant the death of at least ten thousand people, a significant number in the small and sparsely populated Stahl, where immigration was almost non-existent. It meant less mouths to feed, but less hands to work.
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    Building a Kingdom and Conquering the World
    War · Stoicist
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn3mth
    Commented

    I like how his moral struggle was written. [img=recommend]

    "I made the right choice." – He said, clenching his fist.
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    Building a Kingdom and Conquering the World
    War · Stoicist
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn3mth
    Replied to bytter_sirup

    Generally it should be not possible at this point. It should take a long time to do that. They could become under his rule, but cannot be merged with his current subjects. Too many people died and have to much grievience against eachother.

    The plan to dominate the barbarian and place them under Stahl's umbrella has begun.
    altalt
    Building a Kingdom and Conquering the World
    War · Stoicist
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn3mth
    Commented

    Author you should rewrite this part because it is illogical, additionally it breaks the immersion and read flow. But overall your novel is quite enjoyable so far.

    About a month later…
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    Building a Kingdom and Conquering the World
    War · Stoicist
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn8mth
    Replied to AFJDS

    I see. Then you were using it right. Thanks for explaining.Hard to tell sometimes because the tone someone would use doesn't necessarily come through when writing/typing.

    Going to the source of the sound, we can find Gray, running desperately through the rows and shelves. On his back was the girl from before, she was unconscious and was showing no signs of waking up and on his front was his hiking bag.
    altalt
    Pause System: Harem In The Apocalypse
    Fantasy · Renovator
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn8mth
    Replied to TinmanX57

    Sorry I cannot post my long answer. I don't even know if this reply will get through or not. Some error -1000002.

    Any minute now, Linde would knock on his door and beg for attention, and he would spend the rest of his waking hours disciplining her for being so obviously jealous at Adela's arrival. It was good to be a noble scion, even if he was merely a Baron's son...
    altalt
    Tyranny of Steel
    History · Zentmeister
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn8mth
    Replied to AFJDS

    Sorry to the author that my english was not up to par and what I wrote might have came through as rude. Thank you for pointing it out. As a reader I stated that I am expecting an explanation in the story. It is the author's choice to give or not. And it is my choice to pay for his/her work and continue reading or not. If I see somethng that bothers me as a reader I state them in the comment section. And I state that too that if I like something. And when I see something that is just not in line with a character, I expect a good explanation from any author in later chapters. Else the writing is just pure bad in my opinion. And I think you use the hypocritical word wrongly here. I was rude and my style was unintentionally overboard, that is true.

    Going to the source of the sound, we can find Gray, running desperately through the rows and shelves. On his back was the girl from before, she was unconscious and was showing no signs of waking up and on his front was his hiking bag.
    altalt
    Pause System: Harem In The Apocalypse
    Fantasy · Renovator
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn10mth
    Replied to _Waterproof_

    It is okay. We are telling different opinions. I am happy you liked it. [img=recommend]

    That was what happened to Emery before being transported to this world. Thus, he couldn't think of anything other than this place being a world after death or a world of the gods. But that was before he heard the old man saying they would return to their original world after seven days.
    altalt
    Earth's Greatest Magus
    Fantasy · Avan
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn10mth
    Commented
    Abby had decided to join Minos' army a few days ago. But, even though they hadn't formally done it yet, Eda was already getting used to the idea of ​​living in this place. And for her, that wouldn't be bad, the perks were excellent, and still, she could live closer to an old friend...
    altalt
    The Rise of the Black Plain
    Fantasy · RVN_1998
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn10mth
    Commented
    'First, I'll save Grace's life. Then I'll see what I can do... But I swear, one day I'll avenge your death, Samuel!' Vivian swore it in her mind as she walked away from that place where she was before, looking at the crater that her bodyguard's sacrifice had formed.
    altalt
    The Rise of the Black Plain
    Fantasy · RVN_1998
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn10mth
    Commented
    Her family might be known for justice, but Vivian would not risk her beloved friend's life by telling the truth to these elders. 'Samuel sacrificed his life for me, for us! I don't intend to waste this chance, the chance of a life with you, Grace!'
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    The Rise of the Black Plain
    Fantasy · RVN_1998
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn11mth
    Commented

    No point to write this mother side part of the story because nothing happens. She drinks tea and that is all. To tell who her father is could had been told at other times.

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    altalt
    The Rise of the Black Plain
    Fantasy · RVN_1998
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn1yr
    Posted

    Story is mediocre with a lot of cliché. MC has no character development. The Art is decent. After roughly the first half of the story it feels that there were problems during the creation of the chapters. The story became a mess. Ending is abrupt and nothing is closed. It is basically axed and marked by webnovel as finished. I don't recommend this to anyone because of this. Better spend your coins in something else.

    altalt
    Almighty Master
    · Boyi Comics
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn1yr
    Replied to RealBanana19

    This doesn't change my opinion. Hinting at their own son to support them. It is fine if their son gives them as present without hinting or asking. But hinting at it, it is just shameless as parent, they are not disabled or unable to help themselves. And I know their son happily helps them.

    "I find it proud that he provides us with resources but saddening that we cannot provide for him anymore..." Claire said as she remembered the time Davis was nothing but a child.
    altalt
    Divine Emperor of Death
    Eastern · Stardust_Breaker
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn1yr
    Commented

    what about the money?

    Watson was about to leave, but then Aditya stopped him. "Before you leave, make sure to buy at least 100 slaves that we can train to become our soldiers." Now that Aditya had 7 ex-body cultivators there was so much he do could with them. Those 7 could use their experience to train the new young soldiers.
    altalt
    Dragon Monarch System
    Urban · Dark_Bangali
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn1yr
    Commented
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    Valkyrie Smash
    Sci-fi · Nomanalive
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn1yr
    Commented
    Damn it! If this was one of those harem novels I wouldn't have had to worry so much!
    altalt
    Valkyrie Smash
    Sci-fi · Nomanalive
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn1yr
    Replied to ApexPen

    Oh now this is a nice surprise. Thank you for reading my comment and replying author. [img=recommend] In singleplayer games yeah, but I was talking about MMO games where there are only general classes. No limited numbered unique ones. Since this is a novel I expect to see differences, especially in High tier unique classes. In this case it is totally acceptable. Still it was refreshing to see that classes has clear roles here. But this is only my opinion and thinking.

    After completing their class promotion, many classes received a considerable boost in burst damage, especially mages who admittedly walked the path of glass cannons, given that their class specialized in cloth armors. Blacksmiths couldn't create the armor they wore; instead, classes that used leather and cloth armor would require Tailors when seeking special armor that needed item designs.
    altalt
    Zenith Online: Rebirth of the Strongest Player
    Games · ApexPen
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn1yr
    Commented
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    altalt
    Valkyrie Smash
    Sci-fi · Nomanalive
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  • Gralorn
    Gralorn1yr
    Commented

    I love games that has specific roles so I like the system in this novel. A tank is tanking the mobs and incoming damage, the dps do the damage and the healer only heals the party. Nowadays the games I tried allows tanks to do dps + heal themsleves, dps to somewhat tank + heal themselves and healers to do dps too and tank because of healing themselves. Not my cup of tea.

    After completing their class promotion, many classes received a considerable boost in burst damage, especially mages who admittedly walked the path of glass cannons, given that their class specialized in cloth armors. Blacksmiths couldn't create the armor they wore; instead, classes that used leather and cloth armor would require Tailors when seeking special armor that needed item designs.
    altalt
    Zenith Online: Rebirth of the Strongest Player
    Games · ApexPen
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