well yes if he knew it was a celestial

this gives me joy

perhaps

I was going to say the T and D should be closer enough for a mistyping but I guess it was the auto corrector

a good story so far, a few grammatical error here and there and a few repeat of sentences,but overall good, now in game you have choices such as becoming institute leader after destroying the brotherhood and railroad (that has yet to be mentioned here), now according to what ive read so far this minutemen uses a lot of tech so you could after nora somehow gets institute leadership mesh both factions into one, Sico(that I keep calling Sisco) could get Paladin Danse to become the next brotherhood leader(accordign to some remaining files in the game this would have been a option but was scrapped) mesh the faction with the minuteman

it is a nice read apart from the charm working even though it is visible your going to break it soon,

it is a good story so far , the only thing that bothers me is that the battles are written using the same style as normal text/speech by that I mean the battle scenes you could either put them in italics or BOLD my honest opinion, apart from that the battles are nice to read

honestly might as well bring serana from skyrim somehow xD, or just a new character that fits within danmachi , leave the known characters to be themselves

took me a bit to get it but this be my reaction

I honestly can't really say much because its been a while since I last read this story itself so I'm legit a bit lost trying to remember who's who and the why's of where the MC currently is at, anyway from what I do remember and where it currently is at, it is a good fine read keep doing this good work you do with this story

great, now that it is near the start of the journey, I shall comeback to this story in a 100 or 200 chapters goodbye. See yal later, hey author I'm currently writing a fanfic on fanfiction dot net, called multiverse tamer, and I wonder if you'd allow me to use your style of system along the concept of the "royal" version of pokemons, currently it only has two chapters but your story being one that inspired me to start writing my own I just really wonder if I can use what I asked

now all you need is jagged sides, so you can literally spearhead into the side of an enemy ship and commence boarding straight from the main dreadnought

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this the comment I was searching whenever I hear dodge I hear this sentence xD

the most common sense answer I've ever seen , how come I've never thought of that

also this right here either he should be first or last because he doesn't have a surname, Alaric what? surnames are the most significant thing in HP world,whenever potter is mentioned you think of either James or Harry , when Evans is mentions you think of Lily or petunia, Weasley any of the big family members dumbledore is the surname of Albus so in the end what is Alaric Surname

I honestly thought I surname would be mentioned

I dunno why but when I think arcanine line going dragon I expect it to look like the Long Dragon type

this is a me thing but Alpha Squad rows Better on the tongue than squad alpha