One of the biggest downfall caused by bad romance. The story was good to alright the first 60 chaps. Then it went downhill when the Mc started to date and eventually turns into a fuckfest every other chapter. I would not waste my time on this

This is some horrible writing bro 😂, how can you break such a serious moment like a fathers death with some sexy time

The plot thickens

The author has gone to the dark side. he is lost

I like that you actually show the build up of a relationship and dont just time skip. Great chapter

The story started well but i guess the author ran out of ideas because he stopped making any original plot. It started with the unnecessary time skip, then the Mc just goes to the background and anything he has done doesnt have any real impact on the original plot. The Gaang still comes together, same route, same rivalries, same enemies. It also begins to focus more on the gaang as if we havent seen the cartoon. Like nothing actually changed..waste of time and the setup it had.

I do when im passionate, i was really enjoying the story 'till halfway through

it took al lot of self control to not leave a hate comment, but i hope you can take it easy with the pacing on your next story. Freo had an interesting background and beginning which was ruined by the strange shift in the middle of the story. the ending was also very rushed and the romance crushed. may you fair beter in your next endeavour

the thing im mad about isnt even him losing, it's the author making him unnecessarly cruel and bloodthirsty since meeting Azula at around chap. 35. Why would he become this dumb, he would have eventually become strong enough with his talent. feels very forced

Why is he training in so many power systems? Would it not be smarter to just focus on one since he has limited resources. Seems like a waste of gold

i dont understand why he is going so far for azula or the fire nation. In the earlier parts of the story he only massacared because he was attacked and wouldnt needlessly kill just to impress. if he wanted the knowledge of basing se so badly he has more than enough skill to sneak in and steal it. i just dont understand how he went from killing for self defens and revenge to killing for selfish desire(and is helping the fire nation in the process). very weird shift

i do hope he eventually kills and replaces the governing powers of the fire nation since they are responseble for his family's death. no "i have no enemies"

This felt a bit rushed 🤔

I mean compared to the power levels of the world his rewards arent all that big.

🤣🤣 the author is fighting for his life over the coma plot.

I refuse to believe this was written by a human😂😂

Great character development. Maybe show more of the mother internal monologue and how she is dealing with grief

Just a tip: Try to make your Mc struggle a bit more. He already has perfect memory. You can make him work for his skills and control which will show us readers more of his development. Giving so much to him in the beginning already makes it harder to connect to him. Its very hard to write a good/interesting Op Mc so try to delay making him so strong without making it boring.

Im sorry but this seems like a nerf to me. Infinite mana and negation of mana/mental energy expenditure are very different things. It feels like the author is bettaying the reader.d maybe vhange the synopsis to avoind this.

So there's nothing obviously bad about this novel, it has a constant pace which is not too fast or too slow. The cheat is balanced and practical. The side characters aren't hallow and are fledged out. Its all good except its boring. Nothing of interest happens that you havent read in 10 other naruto fanfics, the cheat isn't too special and the plot points are mundane for a lack of better words. It doesn't get your blood pumping wanting to know whats going to happen next .it makes you feel like there's no reward at the end of the story. Its bland.