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Vallori

Vallori

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A university student doing student things in life. Trying to get by like everyone else. And I write stuff that makes me happy, and I hope you enjoy it too, *HappyFace*

2017-09-17 JoinedGlobal
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  • Vallori
    Vallori2yr
    Replied to Blac_Hurb

    Short: 1000 - 1500 words. Longer: 2000 - 5000

    Ch 10 Setting The Stage
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  • Vallori
    Vallori2yr
    Replied to Kreuz

    No. I have been sick so I haven't been writing in months. Been really sick actually. But I think I will stay on this website. It is too much of a bother to relocate to another website, I realized. Have a Wonderful Day!

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  • Vallori
    Vallori2yr
    Replied to DetachedDreamer

    I feel obligated to tell you that; Fairy tail will be a recurring group but not the main focus. Itachi is the main focus, so the only reason to include them fully is if he were to join the guild. Have A Wonderful Day!

    Ch 9 Consequences Of Ones Actions
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  • Vallori
    Vallori2yr
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    It has the potential to be funny with it crossing so many dimensional barriers to get the MC's crew. But the problem is it needs A LOT of editing. The structure of the paragraphs is all over the place. And from one author to another; Do not put multiple dialogue lines in the same paragraph (it is so weird to read). You also need to take another look (maybe three) at the grammar. There are many obvious mistakes even a non-English speaker can point out. Otherwise, I advise downloading the free version of Grammarly, it will fix most sentences here. Also, try and minimize mixing arithmetic words with ordinal numbers. If it is system-related you can use; 1, 2, 3, 4, like that. But if it is anything else, for Example, age then it should only be this: twenty years old... Not this: 20 years old. There are many things I can point out. But here is a summary: - Shorten paragraphs. - Limit the use of arithmetic words, instead go with ordinal numbers. - Check grammar more than ones (use Grammarly) - Do not put two different dialogue-lines of two different people in the same paragraph. I hope this helps. Have a Wonderful Day.

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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to Murdock007

    Happy you think so. That is why I write it, I fine it relaxing. Have a Wonderful Day!

    Ch 5 Chapter 5: More secrets and God nonsense.
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to CodeZeroZero

    His predecessors are. He is not (yet).

    "Don't tell me she is my student." The talk with Hiruzen kind of hinted at just regular civilian students. I don't know how to teach someone to fight; I don't even know how I'm throwing a punch. My predecessors know, I do not. Honestly, I'm not even sure that this is my body. The only time I feel like myself is when I cook food or sleeping. Just walking feels unnatural because of how effective my body is at breathing.
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to CodeZeroZero

    Yeah, I sincerely believe this is nothing for a powerful shinobi. Have you seen the kind of stupid physics-destroying things they do in this show? Also, this is just for fun, don't overthink it. Just enjoy it if you enjoy it.

    I am a competent martial artist now. My body is remembering movements, sort of like muscle memory when you're gaming. It's exactly like that actually. It's programmed into me. My body moves without me understanding it or perceiving it. I could probably dodge a bullet without even realizing it. Oh, and I am fast. Speeding bullet fast which I found out is actually average in this world. A freaking bullet is not anything special here.
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to oceansage

    Trying to demonstrate Hiruzen's badassness. Also, I don't really care how my MC looks. I don't think he looks bad, I think he is demonstrating a realistic mentality. It won't change, so get out now if this annoys you. To save us both future headaches. Have a Wonderful Day!

    Ch 3 Chapter 3: Slow Start
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to WhyAmIStillHere

    I don't know. No love, I suppose. I am not planning any of this just writing whatever. We will see what happens. :)

    Ch 1 Prologue: A Mysterious Note
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to amaturewriter

    No. I just take my time with my stories. I write when the mood is right. And I have a few chapters done - unedited.

    Ch 3 Chapter 3: Perfect Parents
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to Be_n

    It's ongoing. But the process is slow. Patience is key.

    Ch 5 A Politician and a Warrior
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to achile

    The year Erza escaped the tower - the year she joins Fairy Tail.

    Ch 5 A Politician and a Warrior
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to achile

    Just the same name. So, yes!

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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to draculemorningstar

    No! The sword spirit has attained sentience, so it could refuse. But, who knows what his capabilities will be when he grows stronger. #StayTuned

    Ch 3 Chapter 3: Perfect Parents
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
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    I will. It should return shortly. Have A Wonderful day!

    Ch 3 Fairy Tail
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to draculemorningstar

    There is not one currently. 1-2 chapters a week hopefully. Maybe more sometimes. It will all depend on how much time I can spare. I try to make the chapters quite long to make up for the slow release. Have A Wonderful Day!

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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to amaturewriter

    Making Mihawk so trusting so quickly was a deliberate choice. It won't happen with every character MC meets. The reason for it is because Mihawk is OC in this story - my own version and I know it might be weird to think about him so easy-going. But, I think it will be okay, I am also not entirely serious with the whole "plot" about the story. And, I will eventually continue my Itachi story. Have A Wonderful Day!

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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to Old_Man_Sage

    I am trying! It's a little difficult around Christmas to find the time. And soon it's back to school again. Just know that I am trying to find the time to write. Have A Wonderful Day and Christmas!

    Ch 8 A Thousand Cakes Won't Be Enough (Rewrite Finished)
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to Alexis_Dhundervide

    Nothing of mine is permanently dropped, per say. This might sound weird, but I outgrown that story. It is also a mess that I don't have time to fix. Hopefully in the future I will fix CoG.

    Ch 2 Arriving In Hargeon
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  • Vallori
    Vallori3yr
    Replied to amaturewriter

    I will try and do justice to Itachi, but I will still write him my way. Erza isn't gonna be his little sister and she isn't gonna call him "Onii-san" nothing like that. He will mostly always be the stoic badass the world knows him as. But, he will still have a personality and development. I will try and keep him logical most of the time. He will always have a goal and a reason for doing something. If he is acting like an idiot, then there is a reason why he is doing so. Have A Wonderful Day!

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