Zhan_L
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"Greek Mythology"
100% crit on humanoids I think its translation problems hahaha
they're natives of the place oe dimension where the mc was sent?, maybe 🤔
I don't think he gets it
might be a computer virus
or I might be wrong hahaha
it's not the ranking of players that are building it probably means barracks- on going range - in queue and so on.
What kind of ability tho... you need to describe what kind of ability... something like "spikes started to appear on his skin as he use his abilities on He Qi" stuff hahaha
in my opnion its a good story
continue the book please
you can take ur time dont rush cuz rushed scene can be quite boring to read, I would suggest doing the kingdom building arc, piece by piece but dont make it too short of a chapter. You can always right ur ideas on a piece of paper then try reading the draft you made, just don't mash them all up in one chap hahahahaha anyways best of luck in writing the story and remember don't get too hurt by criticisms... keep up the good work !!!