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*assassination not decapitation
cang = blue. try to find an editor .
I don't understand why you chose this ff, there are other much better on fanfiction. Now this story in my opinion makes no sense. Apparently there are a ton of Naruto that somehow got into the DC and Marvel Universes and all of them are beyond op cause why not. There is smut and the harem part makes no sense to me(just cause Jessica Jones can't keep up with MC). The Mc Naruto(cause there is another Naruto who is also op of course) has Many powers some redundant is rich but he steals stuff so that Shield has something to blackmail him with and is familiar with Shield but we dont see how. Anyway for me this story is kinda Meah.
You seriously need an editor. Its diagon alley not slanted lane...
It's Hufflepuff
does it have any editing or its a copy from mtl?
The story is interesting though the harem part was kinda forced. The only minus would be the quality of the translation. Sometimes it feels that this story could use a editor. Furthermore, you can find places that aren't translated or make no sense. Are you using google translate or doing it manually using your knowledge of Russian? In conclusion: while it's definitely not the best translation out there, it is readable though it may annoy some people. Spoilers from here..... The Mc is reincarnated as Naruto and he has a twin sister. His cheat is a system that his past self created and he uses it to grow stronger: he created a new type of dojutsu that is based on sharingan, byakugan and senju genes. He also has magic and reiatsu but those aren't that prevalent, mainly using those as a quick top up for chakra. Also as a minus, the MC goes around inviting every hot girl into his harem(which includes his twin sister Mito that doesn't know they are related). This is definitely not everyone's cup of tea.
The premise is interesting but the writing is pretty bad. I'm not expecting you to be perfect but at least separate narration from dialogue. Furthermore you are constantly misspelling key words from naruto that would be impossible to do if you watched the series or read the manga. To me it feels like a poor translation; hope you improve.