Good setting, good concept, good grammar. Writing style can be improved more. Story progression needs a lot of improvement, as its too forced right now. It is not organic feeling.

Oh, btw theres this novel titled 'FULFILLING MY LUS.T.FUL FANTA.SIES' by 'FANATIC_FAN'. Try giving it a read. The story development there is slow, but feels very organic because of the setting and style. ,

BTW, the hidden word (********) is h.a.r.d.c.o.r.e.

You are going good bro. But tone down on the ******** stuff a bit. Right now the theme is too r.a.p.e.y. Let things be more mild and consensual. Also, the content of the core scenes reads, sounds, and feels too forced. Almost rushed even. Let the story development be more organic, u know. More natural like. The theme and general idea is pretty good, but the progression is forced and the execution is mediocre at best and shabby at worst. I am not trying to be rude, but offering constructive criticism here. As it sits right now, it reads more like the script of a badly executed hen.tai that has been written 14 y.o. vir.gin child. Overall: GRAMMAR GOOD, WRITING STYLE DECENT BUT CAN BE BETTER, STORY DEVELOPMENT BAD TOO FORCED. I hope that you take note of some of my suggestions. I like the idea of your story here. Please don' drop it midway., , .

Doesn't change anything. Unlike the trident of the Greek god Poseidon, which ended in a blunt tipped rod, the trishul is a trident that ends with a sharp blade or a spear head. But it still isn't a spear, as the method of combat for the two are totally different. The trishul is a lot more restrictive as compared to a traditional long spear or a normal spear, or a short spear.

That's not a spear idiots. It's a trident, or a trishul in Hindi.

You mean a sun goddess slave. Besides the goddess of beauty.

The concept of casus Belli comes from medieval Europe. Casus Belli is like a publically accepted valid reason for invading another territory. As one can imagine, without the casus Belli system in place, any lord could declare war on anyone willy nilly without any consequences. The casus Belli waivement scroll here is essentially a pass to invade one territory, or to declare a war without the need for a valid casus Belli. Or at least that's what I think it is. Clarify brother Kotario, brother Devil's Advocate.

Be the vikings

Not all. Just the males. The females will want to change his mind by fucking him to death.

Skyrim.

Buddy, learn to wipe your own ass after taking a dunk.

That is a dumb idea. Many reasons. 1> Limited resources. 2> Limited space. 3> Unpredictable weather conditions. 4> Isolation will cause severe morale drop. 5> You can't be sure how the virus will affect marine wildlife.

This is maybe the second or third ZA novel based in the Philippines that I have read. That's actually really good. Haven't seen any1 from India write one yet.