I think the story is good and I like the quick progression. The language and the style of writing is very good. But for me there are a couple of things that are breaking the flow. 1. the strength numbers goes up a bit to much and we are approaching comedy. First we are talking kg and then tonnes which is good, but now KT (1000TONNES) and it doesn't feel like we have come that far in the story. 2. Spelling can be a problem but it is fine most of the story but then we find a spelling error and it will be used several times in the same chapter and some are reoccurring through out the story. As I said mostly fine but when you find it you will likely find it again during the same chapter. 3. I don't know if it was an error or if it was a change the author wanted to make but there are switches between mph and km/h. It is nothing major but maybe choose 1 and stick with it. 4. Choose a way to describe the heart speed bps, hbps or anything else but a little the same as point 3. Choose 1 and stick with it. Also the first level of it is 10x not 1x if he goes from 1 bps normally and then he use it goes to 10 bps, which is alot, so maybe think about if you want it to be like a superpower later in the story, otherwise I would put 10 bps as the max level for the skill now.

I think it should be ore and not orc here. But I think ingot would fit better in context.

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