Honestly? Worth a read. I have minor issues with the quality, misused words, mistyped words, etc. Seriously, it's VIALS not VEILS. And walking through 'veins' is very different to walking through 'vines'. But if you can get past those minor hurdles? Decent story.

(1-24)Speech and character interactions reads like a Chat Log. Not for me. I think it's a personal issue for me. It feels like the writer can't be bothered to fully flesh out speech and character interactions, so in return I can't be bothered to read the story.