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SlothDaddy2yrCommentedI haven't said anything, but he never tanned that hide, so he probably smelled horrible the whole time, might want a shower
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can't be used continuously*
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exuding* keeping his screams in*
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I'm picturing Sasuke and Naruto here
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do you have a friend or family member who could read it? just a fresh set of eyes could help most of the mistakes I've noticed
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aeromancer?
The champion realm of the wind element was wind whisperer and they could make a wind domain. In the wind domain, the user would gain better control over the wind and the power of his or her spells would significantly increase. - SlothDaddy2yrReplied to xImpulse
yes, it was the beginning of chapter 88
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it was called a klye before, might wanna edit that
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you might want to ask someone to be your editor, or if you already have one, fire them and get a new one
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probably mean to say confirmed his hunch
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I like how Blake thought, 'Blake thought.'
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I guess Kade is Natsu Dragneel "lunching" on those flames
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Didn't he send that to his mom?
William went to his closet and selected the sleeveless black training uniform that he had prepared beforehand. This was the same uniform that he had used during his training in Lont and it was made from the pelt of the Thunder Horned Wolf that he had defeated ages ago. - SlothDaddy2yrCommented
From the context around the phrase, I'm pretty sure everytime you say "Sometime later," you mean "Shortly after." But I could be wrong.
Sometime later, Long Yijun left the scene and returned to the sect master's headquarters, where a couple of figures could be seen gathered outside the door. - SlothDaddy2yrCommented
the goats must be pretty arrogant to already be called gloats
The powerful aura was excluded from her body. The other gloats bleated in acknowledgement as they felt their bodies become stronger. - SlothDaddy2yrCommented
urgency*
"Tell me," he demanded with much urgeness in his tone. - SlothDaddy2yrCommented
What else could you possibly be? would be grammatically correct. It hurt my brain trying to put the sentence together while reading it
"I sensed the presence of my blood in you since the moment I met you. So, if you aren't a dragon, what possibly you else could be?" - SlothDaddy3yrCommented
I feel like there should be a comma after cleric, then again after face. I'm kinda tired and had to read the sentence twice to understand.
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