Mithren
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Mithren1dReplied to Kingspence999The guy did end up following up with a comment that he was trying to do sarcasm and meant nothing negative. I think he was aiming for funny/sarcastic but missed the mark. But yeah. Many people seem too eager to make their 'bit' that they fail to take the time to think things all the way through. I myself am occasionally guilty of this as well even though I try to avoid doing so.
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bears can't run on two legs
Although it was down to two legs, its fleeing speed was still astonishingly fast.detailImmortality: Raising an Ant Queen to Cultivate by increasing stat pointsEastern · Smoke Painted - Mithren1dCommented
it can't run with two limbs
The Black Bear was truly frightened of the human's cunning, to the point it turned and ran.detailImmortality: Raising an Ant Queen to Cultivate by increasing stat pointsEastern · Smoke Painted - Mithren7dCommented
Math isn't 'that' difficult
To be honest, when Yan Fei saw the extra 20 million cash in his bank account, he felt dizzy and could hardly believe that he had become a multimillionaire overnight. Once the demolition was completed, he would immediately receive the remaining 80 million in balance, becoming a true billionaire. Others might not earn so much money in their entire lives, but he had obtained it effortlessly, and aside from thanking his parents, he had no other thoughts. - Mithren7dCommented
Eagle's don't hunt at night. Owls do
The eagle, diving toward the drone, was struck by the Pea Bullets and experienced intense pain. More Pea Bullets hit the eagle in succession, causing it to screech and lose some feathers. Realizing it was outmatched, the eagle cried out sharply, abandoned its attack on the Drone, and fled. - Mithren7dCommented
So at most an hour a day. Seems too limited to me but does give room to grow
Of course, if the flight wasn't operating at such a high intensity and the speed was reduced, the drone's flight duration would extend appropriately but definitely not exceeding 1 hour. Once the Energy Points were depleted, the Drone Avatar would enter standby mode, unable to operate further until the Energy Points naturally recharged. - Mithren7dCommented
I dislike that. In my opinion it'd be better if he actually charged it. like through physical contact or with some kind of cost
Energy resembled the drone's battery power, representing its range and operational capabilities. Flying and other actions would consume energy, and if the energy points were to be depleted, the drone would enter standby mode, unable to perform any operations. Energy points would automatically restore to 100% at midnight every day. - Mithren9dCommented
He receives no money. How is he to leave a copy? Writing materials weren't cheep in feudal society.
Therefore, after leaving ten basic martial arts manuals at the auction house, Ling Xiao returned to the Ling Family to heal his grandfather, which was crucial. - Mithren12dCommented
'hard work money' should just be *savings
"HEHEHE, I spent all of my 3 years of hard work money to buy this console. Fortunately, it would be worth it." - Mithren16dCommented
bottle of hey?
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sigh
Chapter 4: Leveling Up (1) - Mithren16dCommented
Again, redundant. You don't need the chapter number and title showing up twice
Chapter 3: Archer (3) - Mithren16dCommented
the last sentence needs adjusting
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this is redundant.
Chapter 2: Archer (2) - Mithren16dCommented
another senescence that needs adjustment.
The wooden weapons had been laid on either side of the rectangular room on the shelves. The windows seemed to have been carved in a unique style so as to the sunshine only fell onto the weapons, highlighting them. Their system windows floated above them in the darkness, too, underlined by the dark element. - Mithren16dCommented
There's a word missing or something
"If that's the case, let's get down to it!" His impression of Jake better, Richard took him to the wooden cabin and opened its doors, revealing the crude inside. - Mithren16dCommented
Wording is off here. Author or editor might want to adjust things
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*adapt not adopt
Assessing his power, Abel discovered his surprising ability to adopt quickly and remember details with photographic precision. Yet, he felt his potential was wasted.