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Maybe he met “fact”…¿

it's seems like 1 chapter is divided into many smaller chapters 😕, is anyone else getting the same feeling?

I can respect this crossover if you planned it out carefully but i hope you didn't just complicate and increase the complexity of the story just get 1 girl that you could have just made into an original character 😮‍💨, otherwise that puts into question if this story was planned out at all or if it was just half assed with impulse decisions 🤷‍♂️

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They can't have kids together so i was trying to convey that they should make a kid that is like an eternal or a demigod

make a kid, like a half eternal or something 🤔

make one

This review is based on the first 13 chapters. Let's start with the good, this fanfiction has decent grammar which is hard to find when reading fanfics on this site. The character has okay growth so far and I love that he is not OP, this is what sold me on this novel. His growth is earned through hard work and knowledge! Usually, fanfics will make their characters OP from the start which in my opinion is boring especially if the writer is an amateur. What needs improving: The novel has just started so it's hard to guess where it is headed and how it will develop. But so far the most lacking aspect is the lack of descriptions in this novel. Also the environment isn't usually explained in enough detail or none at all. What I hope will be addressed in the future: (My personal opinion) The novel needs to create its own story within the world that the character inhabits if you want to keep it interesting. So please try to make original characters, towns, villains, friends, etc. so you can flesh out this world instead of just copying what already exists since it will more than likely bore readers after 100 chapters give it or take. Good work author! I expect great things from your novel.

there's the stereotypical fatty, didn't expect to find one in a none chiense novel lol 😆

I am so glad that this original novel has better grammar than the other 80% of the original novels. It is refreshing not having to decipher paragraphs, lol.