I really enjoy the story so far. Like what most review said, the story is rather slow in its build up, but that's fine it catch up rather quickly in the later chapter. This story really dive into the darker side of CP (as it should, it's Night City after all). So, if you are squeamish/had the sensitivity of a snow flake, this story is not for you. The writing can be better, some grammar/diction issue here and there, but much more readable than other stories in this platform. Keep the update coming please

The premise of the story is interesting, i never read an arasaka OC before. World background and character design are mostly stay faithful to the materials other than some OC here and there. My gripe with this story is the author writing style. Now i would be the first one to say that the grammar and typography of this story is not great but it is still readable and better than most story in this platform. the writing style however... is rather odd? i don't know how to explain it, but it affect the flow of the story in a bad way. The best way to describe it is like the story keep jumping from one thing to other in one chapter without any sense of purpose? Lastly please please please use more "." (Full stop) in a paragraph. Try to divide one paragraph to 3-4 sentences, rather than one long paragraph with only one sentence with a lot of ",".

tho it might sound similar it is not to that. i mean when you publish something to the general Masses whether it's a book, an art, a product, a song or basically anything, you must be ready to deal with fans and haters because let's face it doesn't matter how good / perfect a thing is there is always "that guy" who hate it with the most stupidest reason and from what i read the author basically ignore those who supports him while he only highlighted the hate comments and that's not cool @_@ and i really like the novel too :(

well that's the risk of putting your work for public a.k.a internet.even if you use other platform, guess what, when your story start to gather folower and popularity, it will attract the same problem that you face in this site (albeit l believe it will be in a smaller scale). if you can't handle hate comments, well, don't publish your work lol.

it's good dont change the story and keep writing pleaasee ( ╹▽╹ )

i nvr use it myself but i heard that a lot of people suggesting grammarly for grammar checking

my only problem with this novel is your writing technique(grammar, paragraph, typos). Your grammar is not that bad and the novel is still readable but i suggest you try to find an editor or smt coz it will help you a lot in this department. next. then each of your paragraph is so long, try to divide them into a more smaller one, and if your character think / saying something, try to separate them from your narrative as it will help us, reader a lot. overall i still like your premise, it's rare to find KHR fanfic so try to find an editor / try to up your skill ^^ thx and don't stop writing