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Flaamwing

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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing1yr
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    Kage didn't exist back then. But thanks for the story.

    Ch 82 Chapter 82: Uzumaki treasure
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    Naruto: the gamer system
    Anime & Comics · Washuru
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing1yr
    Commented

    is astley supposed to be Isekai?

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    Guy in Harry Potter with Quirk Overhaul
    Movies · Sky_Lion
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing1yr
    Posted

    Still early, but the story looks like it will be interesting. The grammer is really bad however and I sometimes struggle to understand what the author is trying to say. Especially when he misuses words or adds something that isn't an English word at all.

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    Guy in Harry Potter with Quirk Overhaul
    Movies · Sky_Lion
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing1yr
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter. You keep using "fill" in place of "feel" however please look them up.

    Ch 82 Causing Trauma 4
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    Earth's IP Game Designer {BOOK I COMPLETED}
    Anime & Comics · Moonwolf1235
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing1yr
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter. But please stop using "agents" for "against".

    Ch 7 Monster Parade!
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    Birth of the Mind Wraith: Danmachi
    Anime & Comics · Distant_Tree
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing1yr
    Commented

    You need fire hot enough to soften metal, not melt (that's casting not forging) or burn it. Thermite is too hot

    Ch 32 Chapter 32 - Making gifts
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    Naruto: The Wandering Blacksmith
    Anime & Comics · what_if_3574
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing1yr
    Commented

    Reviled means hated. I think you mean Revealed which is newly shown.

    Ch 43 43 | Blood Relations
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    Naruto : Tales of Obito Uchiha
    Anime & Comics · Fallen_Crown
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing2yr
    Commented

    Ending by saying it was the last time you would see her is bad writing, as it's authorial foretelling rather than in story portends. Also, rewriting some of the earlier chapters is fine to do but never do them before you finish the story otherwise you end up burning out. Way too many authors have tried it, and they end up frustrated because they are rehashing old stuff when they really want to put out new stuff. It's just not worth the risk until the first draft is done

    Ch 81 Olympus Has Fallen (823 BC)
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    Magical Marvel (HP X MCU)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing2yr
    Commented

    should be self defense, or defense of others. also inhabitants to humanity, after all some aliens may have invaded and started to live on earth, and they have no problems killing of humans.

    Ch 32 Chapter 32
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    The Game Creator in Marvel(News)
    Movies · Unholy_Angel
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  • Flaamwing
    Flaamwing3yr
    Commented

    the whole reason its covered is to keep it disabled. it cant see through things, which breaks this whole chapter.

    Ch 15 Chapter 15
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    I am Sarutobi Ren with a System
    Anime & Comics · gursimran_singh
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