oceansage

Simply love it ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////

So anyone can enter his house? "Hey, you aren't Home? Let me invade your home because I'm your friend"

I love this. Apart from changing the zanpaktu setting to fit devil fruit logic, every thing else is good. I mainly like MC character. //////////////////////////////////////

So it's an AI slop.

" not screaming would be a start" Kids don't talk like that, no matter how smart they are.

" I feel like I'm failing a geography quiz in fantasy novel." "Mae snorted." She shouldn't be able to understand what " geography " is much less find it amusing. I feel like, you are bleeding the mc's character into Mae while writing.

" I'm on the edge of something i should recognise " "Levi didn't smirk this time—he looked more doubtful than anything. He'd seen mods that turned Skyrim into a lizardman apocalypse. Who was to say Westeros didn't have those too?" You might wanna delete the last line of this sentence in ch.3.

How much more retarded are you going to make mc? Screaming everything thing on his mind, with zero impulse control. Even a child would behave better. Instead of being comical, this makes your FF lose depth.

Shouldn't Kakashi had already be graduated? Why no one is pointing this out?