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Honestly, that would make more sense than not ever having seen him XD I don't know how you'd manage that while living in the same household.
only -> alone (this alone with last me for decades)
Please do keep in mind that "too" means also / as well. And "either" basically means 'or'. Either this or that. You are using the wrong word ;)
I thought she said she never even saw her dad even though they lived in the same house..? Which is very strange btw. In any case, yeah, it should be obvious that he never hugged her if they never even saw each other..
Probably: .. throwing it past Shizuka, whipping her hair as it passed. It's an odd sentence anyway
Perhaps put them as F grade missions, D grade mission and so on instead of just F missions. Also the grade B already requires you to.. be as strong as an inner disciple or to form a group? How about that?
don't be smart -> don't try to be smart
his -> her
his -> her
Yeah, I'm also not a fan of all of this foreshadowing. Plus damn, how could someone be so petty. I could see how he might think of her as a rival or think she looks down on him, but the way it is being played here it sounds like he wants her dead for perceived insults, which is just ridiculous.
French door (n.): A door, usually one pair, of light construction with glass panes extending for most of its length. Not sure if the author meant those, but it would be an option.
his body -> her body
Suggestion: complex -> complexion
neve -> never when your starting out -> you're
Suggestion: waste -> waist
I agree. It's way too much. She was barely introduced and suddenly we are in a ten chapter streak of chapters only covering green. Dear author, this is a terrible decision. I myself don't give a **** about green at this point. I am invested in the story for Kat's sake. Some info about characters that she spends time with regularly is fine. But even if this is going to be the case with green, this is too much. I don't know how much I should simply skim these chapters in this regard, since I do not want to miss anything relevant, but it all seems rather irrelevant to Kat so far. A bit relevant to world building, but yeah. Please do not do this to us. If you want to have a split point of view, take your time to introduce the character and swap back and forth between viewpoints so we don't get stuck waiting on getting back to the other character (since we're likely to be more invested into one of them or just want progress on both of them at some point). So yeah. -_- Please!