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Legs

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  • Legs
    Legs1mth
    Posted

    generic system story, doesn't look like it's going anywhere. And this guy supposedly was a failed nascent soul cultivator, but we don't get to see any of his experience in the writing. Comes across as a newbie than a experienced cultivator.

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    Cultivation Starts With Selling Talent
    Eastern · Cryo_Knight
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  • Legs
    Legs3mth
    Posted

    This system is too annoying, the main character is underdeveloped. The comedy isn't funny. Plot is forced. Many spelling errors that could be fixed with quick proof reading, but still there after a year.

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    In Another World with My Wooden Throne System
    Fantasy · Night_of_Dreams
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  • Legs
    Legs3mth
    Replied to Ceaseless_Voices

    Recourse means a source of help in a difficult situation

    He felt that this item shouldn't be carelessly used as it could serve as a lifesaving recourse.
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    Undead God: I Can Extract Everything
    Games · Angry Smile
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  • Legs
    Legs3mth
    Replied to Legs

    I reuploaded the review so I'll reply to you here: Not show every single death, but a few so we could see how his mindset developed. I'm not saying don't write filler, especially since it can help with ideas, but make the filler productive, but they should add meaning. Basically what I mean by showing not telling is giving details to it, here's a example. "Johnny failed his homework, he was embarrassed" --> "When Johnny saw the giant F mark on his homework, his cheeks flushed. He scrunched up the paper and hid it in under his desk, hoping no one would notice" Both of these say the same thing, but the difference is in the detail. In the former, we're essentially just told, in the latter, the same information is shown, but adds details (like the cheeks) and actions (what he does with the test), making the scene memorable and more engaging for the reader. The small stuff can really make it stronger. And by giving us a glimpse into his experiences into the past worlds the main character would be more engaging. As for the story being slower, I don't really know, I'd recommend giving it a rough outline of where you want to take it, or where you want this current arc to end, then you can cut the content that you feel would make it too dragged out, at least for me it helps me keep things organized. Then you can add in different thing in different places in your outlines or switch it around easily, and for me that helps me with ideas since it's basically expanding the outline and cutting things that I don't think would blend in with the story or drags it out. I don't want to discourage you, it takes hard work to write as many chapters as you did, especially if you're unmotivated (I can relate haha), so don't worry, you're doing good.

    altalt
    Lord of the Time: I Can Reincarnate Infinitely
    Fantasy · MadScythe
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  • Legs
    Legs3mth
    Posted

    Forget the synopsis, it doesn't really show us any of that. Story is ok, you can tell it's for the word count with the amount of filler and over describing of every minor character. Too much telling, and too little showing. Main character is underdeveloped, we're told he is supposed to be a trained killer but were never shown any of it, which ties into too much telling and too little showing. If the author showed us some glimpses into the main characters earlier transmigrations it'd probably help develop his main character and understand why feels like he's millions of years old, instead we get 1 short transmigration, and this anime merge world next. His "vicious cycle of dying and reincarnating" isn't really shown, all we get is a few sentences of these lives, which harms character development. Current world so far (chapter 215) is a pretty generic anime world, the world isn't consistent either. No real side characters pretty much all of them is some kind of anime reference. Update stability is good.

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    Lord of the Time: I Can Reincarnate Infinitely
    Fantasy · MadScythe
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  • Legs
    Legs3mth
    Commented

    A couple spelling errors, also when is he gonna give his first summon talents & techniques ?

    Ch 34 Puppet blueprint
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    Cultivation Starts With Selling Talent
    Eastern · Cryo_Knight
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  • Legs
    Legs6mth
    Commented

    doesnt the spot get his powers when the collider explodes during the kingpin & miles fight?

    Ch 17 The Little Pig
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    Spider-Man into the SpiderVerse
    Anime & Comics · rajpootX
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Replied to Vastoking

    whats it callee

    One day I went to sleep and woke up in my mother's house, confused. I quickly ran to the bathroom to see a handsome young me, African American, no facial hair 5'2 in height with black dreads reaching my shoulders. Wait. That's me? Why am I young again? I have no clue what's going on. As I gawk at myself in the mirror, I try to remember what happened last night. Unfortunately,  my memories are a blur. Suddenly, I was torn from my introspection, and whatever fleeting memories I was holding onto dissipated back into its fog. I see words in my mind telling me that I have three special abilities. I grip onto my forehead. The feeling is like a flashlight is blinding my eyes. As my mind recites the abilities, I cringe. The first ability is that I can't miss when I take shots in basketball. The second ability is I can't get tired when I'm playing sports with unlimited stamina. The last ability is to slow down time for three seconds.
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    I Cant Miss !!!
    Sports · MrE
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Replied to Lestda

    they wont let you since this is advance chapter 9 out of 20 😔

    Ch 489 It’s Actually One and a Half
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    Custom Made Demon King
    Games · Dark Old Demon
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Replied to Blood_Prince

    they scamming us. i wait 1 week b4 i ask for refund

    Ch 489 It’s Actually One and a Half
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    Custom Made Demon King
    Games · Dark Old Demon
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Commented

    author is really good at waffling

    Ch 483 The Trumpet of World Purification
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    Custom Made Demon King
    Games · Dark Old Demon
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Commented

    skip chapter its only filler

    Ch 475 A Simple Matter of Breathing
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    Custom Made Demon King
    Games · Dark Old Demon
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Commented

    its so bad. mc is edgy and the author is a creep who had a kid raped for absolutely no reason

    Sorry if this confused any readers.
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    My Self-Insert Stash
    Anime & Comics · aweirdweeb
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Replied to _ZAX_

    ooh ok

    'Stupid Huang Yu.' she pouted slightly. She didn't know why she was so angry when Huang Yu didn't continue. Wasn't this what she wanted?
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    Soul Land 3: Legend of the Jade Emperor
    Anime & Comics · IHaveNthToDo
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Commented

    itachi had wrinkles at 12 tf

    P.S: Itachi is also obviously quite handsome… more handsome than Ichigo actually...
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    One Piece: Reborn as a Fishman (COMPLETED)
    Anime & Comics · HolyJoker
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Commented

    bro theyre 10, how come they act so mature

    'Stupid Huang Yu.' she pouted slightly. She didn't know why she was so angry when Huang Yu didn't continue. Wasn't this what she wanted?
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    Soul Land 3: Legend of the Jade Emperor
    Anime & Comics · IHaveNthToDo
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Commented

    Is this a rewrite? Ive read this before i think..

    Ch 11 Minato VS Kaname |Tournament 3/5|
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    Naruto: An Uchiha’s Ascension To Darkness
    Anime & Comics · visxiin
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  • Legs
    Legs3yr
    Replied to ptbv

    Yeah, he should be angrier at the leaf village for forcing his dad to continue the mission

    Ch 5 Chapter 5: Curse Of Hatred
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    Naruto: An Uchiha’s Ascension To Darkness
    Anime & Comics · visxiin
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