stolen from a shifty sword over on FFNQQ

stolen from a shifty sword over on FFN and QQ

stolen from a shifty sword over on FFN and QQ

stolen from a shifty sword over on ffn and QQ

stolen from a shifty sword on ff and QQ

stolen from a shifty sword on ffn and QQ

stolen from a shifty sword over on ffn and QQ

stolen from a shifty sword over on ffn QQ

this was stolen from a shifty sword over on ffn and QQ

this story was stolen from a shifty sword read the real thing over on QQ or ffn

yo this is stolen from a shifty sword over on QQ and ff go over there and read from the source and leave a 1Star review

nah you just stole this from a shifty sword over on ffn or QQ get a life and stop stealing the time work and effort of others

this story make zero sense. the devils in dxd dont care if peopel know about them they actively hand out fliers that you can yous to summon them with and in the first three chapters you mc is overly worried that they will erase his memories when they would realistically offer him a contract to help him with his maguc

To start Bjorn was not the king of Norway he was the king if Sweden. The second thing that I would like to mention is how horrible it is for authors to pad their story out just so others will see them. why don't you just write ten chapters at 1k words a piece and post then at once. instead of taking places on the rankings form people that are actually trying to write stories or are doing to work on their abilities and hoping for people to give them real criticism. I am not going to be surprised if you drop this within the next week or two.

I came into this on the assumption that it would be about a guy who was able to summon Spartans and a system around that Idea. instead we have your basic dude whi will automatically become a master of combat along will the warriors from for honor who put into a realistic setting become the equivalent of what lu bu from the the three kingdoms was said to be like in battle and to top it all off the mc goes for the basic wishes that every tom and harry does.

I know it's hard to write your own story but you have no right to blatantly steal from another author. you should delete this story and never do something like this again

I really like the part that was written by DarkWolfShiro way better the the rest of the story. I really think that you should stop stealing from other writers when your work cant compare to them

nit to be that guy usually in America you rent at a flat rate for the floor no matter what the square footage is. an this is for commerical use so even then it's too much money

it was a good story idea but the process of doing it was flawed. sword birth in my opinion is one of the top most versatile sacred gears with only annihilation maker being so far ahead it wouldn't catch up. add to that he was given a bunch of wishes that made little to now point had the author be creative in the use of sword birth. I mean he could have recreated any zanpakuto from bleach or any weapon with a blade from anything the guy didn't need the extra wishes

well it has update stability. the rest of the novel is garbage it jumps around alot and it seems the othe has no idea how to make a story line at all