BlazedConscious

Stay tuned! There is more in future chapters.

I like the potential of the story, but it needs some polish. Parts need expanded on, in my opinion to give the world and characters more depth. As the chapters progress, the writing gets a little better. I will keep reading to see how this keeps progressing before deciding whether or not I will keep it in my library.

Fixed, thank you.

Hello, Author here: I give myself a 4 Star, because there is always room for improvement. I implore you to check out my book and give it a read. I have went back and reread the first few chapters and noticed some things that could be fixed so it reads better, but I have yet to figure out how to edit published chapters. If you could give it a chance and read through the first 20 chapters before you decide to drop this book, then leaving me a review providing your feedback, I would appreciate it! At the moment I have only 15 chapters released, but I have a stockpile, and plan on releasing 2 chapters a day. I can promise, it gets good. Well, in my opinion, but I am biased, so *shrug*.

Thank you!