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don't mind the other rude reviewer. you are learning so it's always good to understand . and I agree hopping pov around is bad. stick to 1 and only swap when necessary. otherwise the story has good premise and all the best for your story . as you write you will get better . everyone has to start somewhere. cheers and have fun writing .

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いいね

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Thanks I'll be sure to put it into practice