Review Detail of sean_robbins in WORM: Fate-ful Encounters
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the story was generally fine but unfortunately it has a co author and there character/chapter is so hard to read and down right annoying when u can read it! i was so frustrated by it, that i couldn't even get through the 5th chapter!!!
WORM: Fate-ful Encounters
Saeko_Kaburagi
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I didn't really think that to be honest, I'm not used to doing things in first person, and really it was trying to be that.
sean_robbins:if i had to say anything then i feel like the best would be to slow down? it felt more like u were trying to cram everything in without really explaining anything. like when ur guy first died, i in all honesty can't really tell how! all there is, is he's hammering away, then theres a sword in his heart! i'm guessing there was an explosion or something? but i don't really know?! so yeah it felt like u crammed two or more paragraphs together and left out the contexts!
if i had to say anything then i feel like the best would be to slow down? it felt more like u were trying to cram everything in without really explaining anything. like when ur guy first died, i in all honesty can't really tell how! all there is, is he's hammering away, then theres a sword in his heart! i'm guessing there was an explosion or something? but i don't really know?! so yeah it felt like u crammed two or more paragraphs together and left out the contexts!
Geokit:You have anything more you can give? Something that might help me improve?