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It's okay the story can be improved as long as you try adding your own idea and improve as you progress, as try fixing each paragraph that has a problem on addressing and pointing each character as they make conversation and monologue. I recommend you try experimenting on your novel and add more ideas to the story.

COTE: I have a life simulator

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Sorry, but I'm only google translating it