the grammar is spotless and your writing style is easy to read. ð but what I like most is Jack's character development. we see the go from the weak dude he was, to where he is now, and I hope to see him grow much more powerful. ð€ð€ looking forward to seeing more!!
Alexcj
Liked it!
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