Review Detail of Jiuxianzhi in Sanguinary Rebel

As a newbie writer, I wish you could take the time to proofread your work and be meticulous about the grammar and arrangement of the scenes, especially the characters' conversations. The flow of the scenes should be interconnected but not jumpy. It will help the readers understand the story if you could add more descriptions, a paragraph, or more before switching to a scene where different sets of characters speak. Good luck!