Review Detail of eudine in Dice of Fate

I love the concept! Though this isn’t typically the genre I read, it was interesting. I like how you fleshed out the power structure and world-building, but the characters seem highly one-dimensional like cardboard cutouts. The dialogue was a bit rough, and the MC doesn’t appear to have a concrete personality either. The grammar is a bit rough around the edges as well, and the paragraphs are rather long. Other than that, it was fun to read; keep it up!