Review Detail of FiLL88 in Hollywood Play Boy
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in the very first chapters, he receives everything from the "suspicious" system (forces, money, people and even his own world (+ nuclear weapons control of the world))!. And ... that's all ... there is no point in reading further. (his ideas about the rise of India and similar countries I consider the author's wet dreams.).
Hollywood Play Boy
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if you would like to read a Hollywood themed novel, try out mine. I wont say mine will be better, but I tried my best to edit my content and even provided a proper timeline. 1 warning though if you are going to read my book. The first 2 chapters are time skips where the first 20 years of the MC are briefly shown. Then the pacing slows down alot with many character development and interaction chapters to give a depth on the characters.
TheRamenLord:if you would like to read a Hollywood themed novel, try out mine. I wont say mine will be better, but I tried my best to edit my content and even provided a proper timeline. 1 warning though if you are going to read my book. The first 2 chapters are time skips where the first 20 years of the MC are briefly shown. Then the pacing slows down alot with many character development and interaction chapters to give a depth on the characters.
I see can you tell what you didn't like about it? i am first time writer so any feedback would be helpful?
FiLL88:13/28 Progress.. I already read it once. Or 13 was the maximum at that time, or I threw it halfway.
I tried to re-read it and quit at chapter 5 (how did I last up to 13 last time?). I think I’ll just say that it’s not my format (I don’t like gods pulling strings, sociable systems (+ a lot of systems in the chapter), betta of the hero and much more). others might like it, but I pass..
TheRamenLord:I see can you tell what you didn't like about it? i am first time writer so any feedback would be helpful?
beta hmm i really must suck if the self control part of my MC came off as beta behaviour. Anyways thanks for the constructive feedback though I really appreciate it. I really wanted to know why my work failed in holding your interest, it gave me some peace of mind.
FiLL88:I tried to re-read it and quit at chapter 5 (how did I last up to 13 last time?). I think I’ll just say that it’s not my format (I don’t like gods pulling strings, sociable systems (+ a lot of systems in the chapter), betta of the hero and much more). others might like it, but I pass..image