There are things that I feel the story is lacking. There's a lot description and the dialogue is a few. Explaining the world background on first chapter might be good, but in my opinion it's best to explain to reader slowly as the protagonist journey through the story. You could try to imitate a similar novel on how they do to balance the description and dialogue conversation. I believe you will do well as you learn in presenting your story. Overall the book is good, but need morw attention from the author to improve the book to be betterð
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