Review Detail of TheWriter117 in Beyond The Unknowns

I am sorry for giving this score but I have to be honest here. Please don't hate me for this. Anyways I will give out my review. PS: This review is only based on the first chapter. The prose here in this story is too simplistic, almost feels like a summary, lacking a bit of depth and personality along with being a bit of a mess at times in its structure with its sudden switch to first person pov to third person pov. It also doesn't let the readers feel and immerse themselves since the prose is lacking in captivating you in it's rather fast paced plot. I can't say much for the characters. Zan seems to have potential as a character but he lacks a defined personality and sometimes he feels like he is just there to drive the plot forward. Overall, Beyond The Unknowns is an adventure story that had lots of potential but brought down by being too fast in its plot and not captivating you with it's rather dull prose. Here's hoping you improve author. Don't hold back on your thoughts on my story as well.