Hello! Honest review from the Author. -->Grammar (4/5) There are a lot of mistakes to point out in my grammar. Be it using idioms wrong places or using the same words over and over again. This is rather related to the fact that I don't have much time to write my novel and proofread it thanks to the college I am attending. ( I spend 40 minutes on each chapter only.) I don't believe that my grammar is so poor that it renders my book unreadable. I believe that I have maintained a sufficient level of grammar to make it readable. --> Updates (5/5) There is nothing much to say. Unless something extreme happens like an exam that takes 4 hours straight, I post two chapters every day. --> Story development (4/5) The pacing of my novel may not be to everyone's taste, as it includes a lot of monologues from the main character and occasional POV changes. This can result in a slower pace than some readers may anticipate. However, I believe it still has value and encourages readers to give it a chance. In my opinion, the story isn't terrible and it doesn't necessarily make one feel bored. However, it may not be the most captivating read available. -->Character Design (4/5) I believe that my portrayal of the main cast in the game was inadequate and poorly executed, resulting in a loss of one point. Nonetheless, I also believe that the other characters possess unique qualities that differentiate them from one another. --> World Background (5/5) I believe I have created a well-crafted world with a rich background, incorporating diverse elements. However, I understand that some readers may find it ambitious. One of the strongest aspects of my novel is its foundation, particularly the well-executed RPG elements. --> Romance (4/5) Although not subject to star ratings, it is imperative to address the aspect of my portrayal of female characters in the game. I take great pride in avoiding the common trope of presenting them as mere sexual objects for the main character. These females are strong and independent, playing pivotal roles in shaping the narrative. They are integral parts of the story, not just decorative accessories. Despite having had several relationships, I have never experienced the feeling of falling in love with another person thus far. Therefore, this part may be a bit dull, and I can't do much about it since it basically stems from my personality. Hope this review helps.
Darkness_Enjoyer
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いいねPlease give me an example so that I can understand which enemies you are talking about, since I am sure Callius is not such a character.
EyeOfSilver:Then why does he let his enemies trample on him constantly his had several chances to eliminate them yet he lets them cause trouble, or do you have no creativity and have to use dumb useless brain-rot plot devices to get your story going?
Great_Akshit_8853:Hey Author, discord link got expired, can you post the latest one from the server, thanks
Nope. Atleast i haven't seen any till latest chapter. Though I would say not every beautiful woman would fall for mc and some would rather annoy due to their ignorance and underestimating mc
Rionn:No NTR, right?
Really, at chapter 62 mc helps a person (“dogs”) by telling them that a dungeon with valuable resources would open next month on the 21st. How is he evil?
Darkness_Enjoyer:Neutral-Evil.
Mc then proceeds to say, a person who would beat a person who tried to rob him to get money for his sibling is evil. Can you actually tell me whether mc is evil/villain? If he isn’t an evil/villainous mc why include ’villain’ tag?
Uncertainty:Really, at chapter 62 mc helps a person (“dogs”) by telling them that a dungeon with valuable resources would open next month on the 21st. How is he evil?
Uncertainty:Really, at chapter 62 mc helps a person (“dogs”) by telling them that a dungeon with valuable resources would open next month on the 21st. How is he evil?
Darkness_Enjoyer:Bow that I think about it, you are right. 'Neutral' would be a lot better.
EyeOfSilver:why is mc still so weak after 300 chapters of pure filler?
Do you prefer weak MC's who lose everything and like to torture your MC as 'plot device'? Because it really feels like the MC is just some dog who keeps letting his enemies trample all over him
Darkness_Enjoyer:Because I wrote it so.
EyeOfSilver:Do you prefer weak MC's who lose everything and like to torture your MC as 'plot device'? Because it really feels like the MC is just some dog who keeps letting his enemies trample all over him
Then why does he let his enemies trample on him constantly his had several chances to eliminate them yet he lets them cause trouble, or do you have no creativity and have to use dumb useless brain-rot plot devices to get your story going?
Darkness_Enjoyer:Mc is not a dog who lets his enemies trample on him but okay