Review Detail of Wedge in Next Time In Another World

Hey! Author here! This is my first novel as well as an attempt to approach writing in general. Yet I have big ambitions with this one. So far, though, don't expect any quick updates. It takes me somewhere from 6 hours to write and translate one chapter. I need to get fit. Of course you can motivate me with a stone :D I'm counting on your criticism, especially when it comes to my English, I wanted to learn this way. If my idea turns out to be popular then I will think about a discord or something :P Let me give myself a good rating (at least one) xD