Cool concept I love one piece already, cant wait to see where it goes. Apart from a few spelling and grammar mistakes this is really good, can tell your starting out would've loved this when I was so keep on writing.
md_rizvi
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いいねmd_rizvi:Thanks for the support bro support bro.You see i am trying to be a writer.I started writing just yesterday.I don't have any editor but don't worry i just edited the chapter 4 so the mistake you have seen should be fixed.Tnx again for the review