Well, I've never played Metal gear before, so i can only give some vague reviews. For starting chapter, it was interesting and I was instantly hooked to the mc. Since i did not know much about the mc's backstory, I wonder if you will give some of it in the later chapters. That will be good as it would go more in depth to Jack's personality. As for the writing, it's pretty neat and easy to read. Maybe incorporate details and better vocab to wow the reader. Its not necessary but good to do. Overall, cool story and I look forward more chapters. Have a nice day! [img=recommend]
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