Review Detail of Blackwater in My Life In Marvel

overall not bad but a few things stand out in a negative way. 1. The story need heavy editing or maybe a rewrite to structure it better. The POV chapters look and feel disjointed from the story or are basically 60% copy of the MC perspective. 2. The Romance is handeld pretty badly, so far he just collects girls everywhere and the MC seems to struggle with the kind of guy he is, sometimes he acts like a gentleman Pervert, sometimes like a guy who has no filter. The very raw English doesn't help to convey what the MC really means. 3. The MC has a very disjointed character profile, very vague Goals if any and sometimes tips over the line of being just plain stupid or nonsensical. So for all the Time and chapters the MC had to flesh out a charter build he still seams unfinished. 4. The plot and world seams to get more convoluted and while that is normaly not a big deal, the fact that the writing quality is so spotty makes it really hard to enjoy the story.