Wonderfully written from the start. The way the character's looks and feelings were described was like it was a published best-selling novel. Very vivid descriptions make every scene clear. Character dialogue was very spot-on and realistic. There also seem to be some real-world commentaries that were sprinkled in but all of them were appropriate and somewhat true. Great start and keep doing your best, Author!
Callele Lyvance
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いいね返事はありません。最初になろう!