Your fanfic has potential, but you need to fix your grammar. I recommend using Grammarly to fix some of your sentences. Also, what was the point of him having a son? When he got reincarnated, he just brush it off like it was nothing.
Phoenixrd
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いいねCould have played that better. something like he likes to watch martial arts stuff from books and anime to movies. If he cant even worry about his son, then thats kind Of a Mentally broken Mc
Phoenixrd:The son was more of a gateway into him watching dragon ball
Nightly1:Could have played that better. something like he likes to watch martial arts stuff from books and anime to movies. If he cant even worry about his son, then thats kind Of a Mentally broken Mc