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As an author, I would like to say this novel sucks. My story and plot are trash. I am trying to improve. I don't know about my grammar. Is it good or bad? Well, I don't care for it now. I need to improve my story.
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So, I need to establish the presence of character and learn to make the foundation of the story? If it's the problem then I will try to improve.
Pov:Your grammar is decent and it can be refined as long as you continue to write and read other novels. The problem is the pacing of the story, you introduce another character when the last character hasn't yet established her presence on the story. I can tell you that once you progress onto the story that you won't have the foundation of explaining why did particular 'event' happen. The problems on these dimensional fanfics is sometimes those who read it has no clue what story is use. HxH is a nice start of power up but unless you can explain why they can immediately learn Nen except for the reason that they are from the other dimension, when the store hasn't yet open up. I do praise you for starting this fanfic though. Godbless your creativity, you'll need it when you want to keep continuing this work.
Your grammar is decent and it can be refined as long as you continue to write and read other novels. The problem is the pacing of the story, you introduce another character when the last character hasn't yet established her presence on the story. I can tell you that once you progress onto the story that you won't have the foundation of explaining why did particular 'event' happen. The problems on these dimensional fanfics is sometimes those who read it has no clue what story is use. HxH is a nice start of power up but unless you can explain why they can immediately learn Nen except for the reason that they are from the other dimension, when the store hasn't yet open up. I do praise you for starting this fanfic though. Godbless your creativity, you'll need it when you want to keep continuing this work.