well, first of all , the grammar is really bad . sentences are connected horrendously.
explanations are half aszed.
charachters are stupid with no personality given.
i agree to your review cause i am really bad at writing and i am not a literature and I don't know what to write about others cause i write what is in my imagination and sorry for the grammar i did not really my forte i got an average grade in school but i forgotten the lesson very easily