Review Detail of Darius_Chromwell in Harry Potter and the White Death Eater

Either English is not the authors first language or the author hasn't seen anything HP related in a while. I'm not saying that the translation quality is horrible but there is defiantly room for improvement. Simple things like calling harry (The boy who survived) or saying the Holy 28 when it should be the sacred 28, My favorite though is calling Hagrid the Hogwarts Ranger (I can't get the image of Hagrid in a park ranger outfit out of my head now).